>>54110566Thank you for that. Trying my best with the prose and such. Its very much engrained in my brain after doing stuff for so long.
Ive been trying a bit to go into his transformation a bit, but i havent been able to get a good handle on a good time and place to do so. It will be done more properly in the future.
the final scene makes sense with chapter 5. It's more so like a cutscene transition to someplace else to introduce new people, but i get how reading it detached from other chapters without context would be hard.
The Angelic woman will be related to the story in a big way, and ive spoken a bit more about it in the previous thread as well.
but thank you for the critiques.