>>53470541>>53471354Kaiji seems to default to a snarky, informal manner of speaking, but he lifted it wholesale from his memories of the Ashnime's Meowth upon waking up as one - it's just as much a character as all the other personalities he puts on to get someone to lower their guard. Speaking like this has no discernable benefit, but it's more meant to get himself into character than to have any particular effect on anyone else. It helps him push down his objections about the things he does in order to get by however he can, another mindset his human life instilled in him. As he gets used to the guild life, he'll let his guard down around his fellow human guildmates and speak normally more often, at least in their presence.
As for the fight, I tried to instill it with a real sense of struggle. I absolutely hate the idea of just handing my characters everything, so I wanted it to feel like they only barely won - like they really had to earn their victory.
>paragraphsYeah, even I noticed while I was editing it. Honestly, the reality is that my first draft was actually even rougher, it was my first time really writing in a while (especially anything where I'd be writing something long without being interrupted by someone else's input) and I just tried fixing it up as much as I could so I could get my foot in the door and move on past the origin story. The beginning was especially rough, I had to basically rewrite entire paragraphs, though as it went on I didn't have to redo the wording or dialogue as much because I'd been getting warmed up after a few days of writing. I figured I could probably go back and fix the formatting more whenever I got around to writing the second part of their journey to Capim and stuck it onto the first post, because I already felt like I was running on empty at that point. It won't be the next thing I tackle because I'd rather get into writing them as part of the guild instead of more solo adventures with only tangential connection.
