>>28501227As
>>28501439 and
>>28501589 put it, ellipses as a form of punctuation have their uses - to rely on them when you could say something instead though, especially if it adds to the mood, is to rob yourself and your reader of an opportunity to do more with your prose. Unfortunately, well used ellipses also have this very effect, and the lack of further elaboration produces a greater effect. It becomes a judgment call really. I use ellipses generally if I think that their use can perfectly convey exactly the pause/hesitation I want at that moment, otherwise I'll try to write something out.
>>28500401Sure.
>>28481021The lack of speech tags is sometimes a tad bit disorienting. I can follow speech without he saids/she saids pretty well, but there were a few times early on where I got turned around once or twice.
Descriptions, when present, are pretty good, and they marry well with the considerable amounts of dialogue present, but at times the dialogue becomes overwhelming and you're left wondering why there isn't some description to break it up.
Overall though, it's fine. Nothing jumped out at me that was outright offensive, broken or otherwise. I liked your use of scents and actually would have liked to see it used more to convey other emotion.