>>53651751Great work--with both the writing and the drawing! The character summaries are nice and detailed, and I like all their personalities.
I enjoyed reading the story, too. The dialogue is written very well, and the characters' personalities are fun and clear to see. The Aura-sensing scene is really interesting; I like how you described their auras.
As for criticism, there are some minor typos scattered around, but my biggest critique is that the start of the story is confusing, with a ton of quotes that have no context and aren't assigned to any speakers. You may want to open up with something like "When the strangers came to Capim Town, they heard a lot about the Clover Guild", which would give context to the quotes, and make it easier to understand that they're a bunch of random quotes from the townsfolk. Aside from that, the story's pretty clean. Good job!
One more thing... considering how Cassie reacts to cutemons, I shudder to think how her first meeting with Booker will go. I'm not sure if he'll survive all the petting and cuddling.
>>53643205I finally got around to reading your story, Ross. It's really good! You do a nice job depicting everyone's emotions and reactions, especially Ross's anxiety and Kecleon's rage. Ross's relationship with Kaiji is pleasant, too. I think some people mentioned last thread that Ross is like the "little brother" of the guild, and Kaiji is the big brother, or something like that. I definitely got that vibe from the way they interact. And the painting scene near the end was nice; I like the drawing you included.
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Skorupi is cool. Good choice. By the way, if you evolve, you should totally try to become a Citizen Snips. You'll be invincible.
>>53653926I like it. Really good pixelization of the logo.
>>53654400Spiffy.
>>53654435>elm has a phobia of being eaten>he reads a book about voreHe's really gonna need some brain bleach after this.
