>>28169837>mfw I remember that I forgot to remember to check up on /vpwt/ for the last few days>and I come back here to see the Latias thing updated thrice while I was gone Well, this won't do. I'll give some feedback on the last three parts I missed; hope it helps.
First, the pros...
To begin, I like how the characters' emotions are given a lot of attention. Considering how Latias can sense emotions, it's fitting that the story describe that kind of thing, letting the reader get a sort of glimpse of what she can sense.
I also think the whole "Latias is a ghost" theory Michael started running with in ch3 is interesting, and I feel like it kind of adds a bit of worldbuilding and lore to the story too, showing that this story takes place in a world where people do believe in spirits and ghosts. And speaking of worldbuilding, I also like the inclusion of backstory for the island and the lighthouse as well.
And I like how the info about Clayton is sort of trickling out slowly, with each part adding a bit more about him. It leaves a little bit of mystery, which is good.
Finally, I think the little twist/reveal at the end of ch4 was handled well. In particular, I think the implementation of the scanning machine thing was a pretty interesting and unique way to handle such a reveal.
