>>11798226Catch up on the Human Species dude.
>>11799134You could pull it off, as I said last time.
However, this summery has a darker theme to it, and there are just a few concerns.
>MysteryThis summery stinks of it. It implies the warden wasn't the master plan of it, and someone else laid down the final order or framed him so that they would gain power. Whoever that is, you should keep us guessing until you want to reveal him/her.
>emotionsMurder is very tough on the human soul. It takes an experienced killer such as a soldier or a hitman to be able to just kill and forget about it like it was just an ordinary day. The transition from revenge to serial killer has to be either really quick or really slow.
>hopped up on drugsThis kinda kills my above point by just proving that it's insanity in the first place, so you might want to take it out if you want to have a subplot featuring the human emotions on killing or keep it in for a lecture on the madness.
Also, things to consider:
>the role of pokemon in this fic
>how he makes his medicines/toxins
>point of view
>backstories for mother and the warden, like they were involved in something else>>11799206You wrote the hilda/hilbert story a few threads back, right? Can I have a link to it please?
And since I'm busy fucking around on here with nothing to show for it, I might as well as show you guys what I've been working on.
http://pastebin.com/PnHEFW63It's crazy.