>>54396346Nice to see you writing again, Beast-anon.
I think you did a good job with this one, especially with the fight scene, interactions between Beast and Ronnie, and comedy
and I love how you referenced this old art of yours, kek. Also, as other anons said, I like how Beast sees the guild as one big gang of hooligans.
But in the ending, I’m not sure how Beast
missed all the pepper plants they passed, especially since he was riding Ronnie—he should’ve noticed his own mount eating the peppers off the bushes, I think. Kind of a small nitpick, though. Aside from that and some typos here and there, I don’t really have any criticism for this story. Good work.
>>54397492Decent little intro for the characters. I think it’s interesting that a sentient trash bag and a tiny insect decide to become janitors. Those species aren’t very conducive to cleaning things up, so it could be interesting to see how they overcome their limitations and handle that job.
As for criticism: the grammar could be improved. Make sure you capitalize words properly, and watch out for run-on sentences and comma splices. Also, don’t forget to specify who’s talking during conversations.
>>54399370>a bit of romanceOoh, interesting...
I’ll check this one later today, I’ve got something else to finish up first.
>>54390473Sounds complicated, but it could be cool.
>>54399275Wow, this is awesome! Even though it’s a sketch, it’s already looking really good. I love the pose you’re going with, and the background is a good idea too. Can’t wait to see the finished version!