>>11935450It seems a little too short and doesn't build enough characterization. There's not really any 'love' in it, besides gentleness- no hint of a relationship. While snow always makes for a romantic getaway, it seems like it's just there for a minor annoyance than an actual atmospheric effect as a problem.
You could hint at the relationship between the two more- obviously the typhlosion is fully evolved, so they have some link together. There's sex in there alright, but not really any passion to follow through with. You could first start by defining their relationship a bit more and then lead up to the sex rather than have the sex and have an 'excuse' for it.
I give it a fair. It's not completely deviod of any passion, but this isn't a porn video, this is a storage, and you can't hear the fake moans and see the twisted faces of pleasure, so you have to make up with it by characterization, which is best in short smut stories.
I think you could do bette, but then again this smells of spur of the moment writing.
>>11939992I don't know any specific names, but I'll list the ones I can.
>Get pokemon in the morning>evil team fucking around>incompetant dudes fighting you>by the time competant dudes fight you, you're strong enough to defeat them>legendary that keeps the world from exploding or whatever>24/365 all day every day pokemon training, no time for relaxing>trainer usually gets their shit kicked early on>nurse joys are always kind and helpful 