>>53434542Amazing that you managed to develop all of that out of a joke in the thread. Totodile's antics were funny but had an emotional component to them as well there at the end. And the rewrite definitely improved the flow/readability, looking at it.
>>53438055Good story, anon. Wooper was refreshingly cheerful/energetic/optimistic, and I kind of liked how (perhaps unintentionally) Chespin's experiences with swimming contrasted with Gus's in his story.
>Part of this felt awfully like being recruited into a cultKind of does, doesn't it? Well, at least it's a good cult to be in.
>>53438732>>53441625I found your work greatly amusing, and quite enjoyable. "A conman and his straight-laced partner fighting against Taliban-turned-waifish pokemon" sounds like a shitposty premise, but it was actually executed pretty well - the series of Kaiji-induced coincidences was funny. I'm interested in hearing more about their pasts, and their future adventures as well.
>>53443929But they're cute drawings, as well.
>>53444605Oh, that's cool! Really neat dungeon idea, anon. Do you imagine some of the outdoor portions to be something like the hub/overworld dungeon segments from GTI? Might try doing something with that later, if it's ok - how large would the island be?
>>53444630Heh. (But seriously, that's pretty cool.)