>>25103679I haven't been reviewing much because I've had friends over, got sick, and have been writing Ears primarily. You're a little bit abrasive about it as well.
>but “patronizing” meant “not suspicious,”Not entirely sure if the comma is meant to be inside the quotations, but in this kind of setting I'd probably use apostrophes as to not confuse these with vocalization.
The beginning is a little shaky with a slight overuse of commas, but other than that I don't see anything wrong with it. Jacob's an enthusiastic little fucker though, ain't he? The first time I went through PSMD I wanted to be a tsundere bitch to my special doggo, but absolutely caved after saying no to the scene you just wrote.
