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>How should I post my fics? Please, for the convenience of everyone involved, link to a host like
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We're also looking to collect ideas for fanfics as a resource for stumped writers. Feel free to throw an idea out there; someone may choose to use it themselves!
Topic of the Thread:
Did you write anything during our vacation? Share it!
Anonymous
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Welcome back, motherfuckers.
Anonymous
>>23156181 >Did you write anything during our vacation? >being productive Saikou !!N1ZuL/4CLu1
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Whoa, hey, alright. We're back, baby!
TheOnlyMoth
>>23156181 >Did you write anything during our vacation? TheOnlyMoth
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>>23156181 Well, in any case, to keep threads linked, I'll post the link to previous thread
Obsolete Thread
>>22803054 Pokemaniac G. !!5lyd4F1oWNq
>>23156181 >Did you write anything during our vacation? Saikou !!N1ZuL/4CLu1
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>>23156198 >>23156345 >>23156728 i'll have something soon, i swear Pokemaniac G. !!5lyd4F1oWNq
That Guy with that One Ashfic !latXRxVvNs
That Guy with that One Ashfic !latXRxVvNs Wed 01 Apr 2015 18:53:27 No. 23156855 Report Quoted By:
It's great to be back!
Anonymous
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Well, If not writing, any ideas come to mind?
Vulpsis
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I was almost finished with what can be regarded as my biggest project yet... But then monster hunter happened...
Saikou !!N1ZuL/4CLu1
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Oh! Uh, I guess you could say I worked on the new catalog during our absence (along with Ancientpower in the IRC). Check it out, everyone! It's organized better and features semi-automated catalogging so it's way easier and more reliable to stick fics in there not that anyone's got anything to add :V
Mistress Hand
...is it really back or is this another all fools' ruse?
Anonymous
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>>23157254 We came back empty handed!
But I guess for today I should switch all my fapfics to the Halloween ones...
Anonymous
Well right after I finish my Mirai Nikki fic, I'm planning on writing one where a boy meets an abandoned Shedinja which becomes his starter. Dunno yet whether I want to give him an all bug team or if I want to mix it up. I was also thinking of one where a guy is actually Team Rockets secret member in Pallet Town because his mother worked (and died) on the Mewtwo project. It'll take place in the anime, and he'll have interactions with Ash and the TR trio. His starter will be a Wynaut. At this point, I'm considering just merging the two ideas together.
Anonymous
Anonymous
i wrote this shitty mystery dungeon fic once
http://www.wattpad.com/myworks/21599703-chaotic-good im most proud of the story cover
Anonymous
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>>23157367 >Wattpad >requires sign-up to read fuck that pastebin that shit or something have you no shame
Anonymous
http://pastebin.com/pL4v3e6R Should I make this prompt into an actual story?
It was based off last thread where some people compare Gardevoir's singing to that of a banshee, which got me curious and hence, the prompt above.
Pokemaniac G. !!5lyd4F1oWNq
Here's something for the sake of the thread.
A request I did during the thread's down time. It contains OC from the requester.
http://pastebin.com/ZXdi3UHQ Anonymous
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>>23157367 could anyone RIP out the text from here and put it in a pastebin? Rather not register to view a story.
cge0361 !Xatu./qcKY
Been busy with IRLs, but: 1) Fic I mentioned before finally figured out where one of its subplots wants to go. Requires significant re-writing but all the better for it. Considering that I hoped to start releasing parts weeks/months ago, once I'm back in a writing groove I hope it will complete rapidly. 2) New fic idea in mind. 3) At this exact moment, I'm working on LL Chapter 23 and watching Star Trek . 4) Been once again revising all my stuff. C/E is done except for "final" proof-reading. Its first chapter, especially, improved which is good because it was bumpy and bad; mostly tiny tweaks throughout, otherwise. Probably going to mirror at AO3 once I'm "satisfied." AO3 allows images. My stories never get fan art. Everybody else's do. Life is sadness. No wonder writers drink themselves to death. Not actually jelly. Except a little.
Anonymous
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>>23157627 Oh if only people actually had that much of a libido...
>>23157560 People are still hyping and spooked about the yandervoir story from however long ago. We don't need to cause another death-induced story.
Unown
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>>23156181 >Did you write anything during our vacation? 3 chapters of the fic that I debuted in the last thread, actually. Presently attempting to get out another one sometime this weekend.
>http://archiveofourown.org/works/3465593/chapters/7715558 Vulpsis
Mistress Hand
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>>23160341 >Bear no please, anything but that!
Anonymous
mobile fag
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>we're not dead! One does not simply disappear when VP's condition worsens. Still...I guess its fine now that you're back.
Anonymous
>tfw I am actually making a fic about a fangame Admittedly, it's also to voice my displeasure about the things I don't like through the main character/player character
Anonymous
Are there actually any really top quality Pokemon fanfics aside from A Game of Champions? I tried reading Sun Soul but it was godawful.
Anonymous
>>23162863 Lol, in my opinion Sun Soul is pretty hit and miss. The writing and prose is actually quite good, but the plot itself is ridiculous and stupid.
I'd recommend you read Pedestal. It's kind of a milestone of Pokemon fanfics afaic.
I also really like this one
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/7397188/1/Under-the-Same-Sky Anonymous
Anonymous
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>>23162881 Thanks for that rec, Under the Same Sky was actually really cool. A little too angsty for my tastes, and it kind of seemed like the author felt what happened to make Black such a cunt was some kind of mystery when it was obvious from the first chapter, but that was a great ending.
Anonymous
>>23162839 It's not the first time this happened. Planning on correcting the errors or just doing your own interpretation of the fangame?
Also is that pic parasyte?
Anonymous
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>>23164375 >Also is that pic parasyte? Oyasumi Punpun
Anonymous
Are there any good Zinnia stories yet, regardless of work?
Anonymous
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>>23157627 The mental image of a Pokemon evolving mid-coitus is absolutely hilarious. I love how stupidly over-the-top this is.
Vulpsis
I wonder, would it be poor in taste to post the most awful requests I received?
Anonymous
Anonymous
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>>23167400 thread needs content, so go ahead.
Anonymous
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>>23167400 Maybe,
but I think you could call some of what you've written 'poor taste' anyway. Post 'em on up, it'll be a good laugh, I bet.
Anonymous
>>23167400 Your pic reminds me of http://pastebin.com/HVH1yXgA before shit gets real Anonymous
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>>23167750 That's no coincidence.
Anonymous
>>23158570 well, even if your stories don't get fanart, you're still pretty popular here and on FFN.
SadIdiot !f37barISTA
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>>23167750 Maybe the other way around.
Night March Guy !jLgQm10tTI
>>23166151 Thank you anon for the idea. I've been wanting to write some yandere, but needed a girl. Zinnia is perfect for what i plan to do
Anonymous
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>>23170005 well,
she did supposedly had and lost a child, if it adds fuel to whatever you plan on doing cge0361 !Xatu./qcKY
>>23169197 >don't get fanart It's for the best, really. I just finished nit-picking word choices on a story nearly five years old now
holy shit so you know if I ever got an independent fanart 99% of my thoughts would be about how poorly I communicated the environment because of differences in how the background was drawn compared to how I imagine it.
And that's assuming the work is from a competent artist. Considering the brutality of my objective critique… no good can come of this situation. I know, because I did once get a non-canon fan-art and a promise of a second. I pointed out a proportion/perspective issue that could use a tweak. He quit and turned into a brony a week later. Sometimes my powers have bizarre effects. It just comes to mind because AO3 allows images, and when I see that opportunity spent by other authors to slap a full-screen Tumblr-ripped image atop their fic I shake my head and imagine how my fics could benefit from strategic illustrations.
Really though, I think it's just the old broken promise of comic treatments lingering in my mind. >popular here I do get rec'd shortly after Pedestal each time somebody asks for good-fics, so that's something.
>and on FFN. Not according to story statistics, but LL does get a trickle of attention because
tags include Gardevoir .
>Whimsicott +1
priority. Anyway, all that matters is that I haven't written anything seriously
as gifts to the internet since last summer and I need to do something about that to remain relevant to our interests.
Anonymous
Anonymous
>>23170541 Do you want to talk with someone, anon?
Anonymous
>>23170565 he talks too much
Anonymous
>>23170688 oh yeah he's totally disrupting the riveting discussion that's currently going on itt
stop getting mad at nothing
cge0361 !Xatu./qcKY
SadIdiot !f37barISTA
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>>23170707 Be cool to your fellow writers.
DreamWeaver !XGSNhfyWts
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>>23170707 Calm yourself.
To keep this related I have something else I've been working on.
Mewtwo !!vtVYdnAn525
That Guy with that One Ashfic !latXRxVvNs
That Guy with that One Ashfic !latXRxVvNs Fri 03 Apr 2015 20:47:38 No. 23170784 Report Quoted By:
You know who here, with my Bi-threadly suggestions post. As we know by now, I'm doing an anime fanfiction where Ash finally stands face to face with his own mediocrity and strives to face it. He leaves the Kalos region and one month trips to the past five regions to try and wrap up a lot of old promises and to find himself, before returning to Kalos to finish the league. I have the plot frame put in place but I'm wondering what you guys would want to see in a fanfic like this. Keep in mind these plot points are already planned.
http://pastebin.com/CrAwnyE8 As always is there anything that you guys would like to see out of the Anime that would only ever come to pass in Fanfic form?
Anonymous
>>23170688 compared to cge's other posts from the past, it's actually shorter than you think.
Besides, if you have a problem with it, you could always filter the trip and move on.
>>23170774 It's too late. It's happening
Anonymous
Anonymous
>>23171072 don't think about it anon. Mewtwo just posts on things he doesn't like for replies.
Anonymous
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>>23171092 righty-o, never seen that particular tripfag before, thanks for the heads-up
Vulpsis
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I'll post some of the requests that were too much for me when the thread gets too slow! Human male and Feraligator female Please include doggy-style and impregnation. Breast suckling and lactation [/spoiler:lit]
VS
Woops, screwed that spoiler up. Anyways, like I said before I'll post a request I received that was... A bit too much for me when traffic is down. Human male and Feraligator female. Please include doggy-style and impregnation. Breast suckling and lactation
SadIdiot !f37barISTA
How productive were you today? All of you.
Anonymous
>>23173116 Well, I learned the current chapter of my story is even worse off than I thought it was.
And that my editor is a lazy idiot, what do I pay him for? SadIdiot !f37barISTA
TheOnlyMoth
>>23173116 10% productive, spent my time working on making corrections for frillish thing today rather than write anything new for it.
Vulpsis
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>>23173164 That's basically me in a nutshell nowadays
Unown
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>>23173116 Got some help from Saikou editing an old chapter of my latest fic and am presently working on editing the next chapter for publishing.
So... Somewhat productive?
Weiss Alba
When this damn semester ends I'm thinking of seriously starting on that fic with Tate&Liza and the Lati@s. What sort of psychic powers should the (human) twins have? I can think of telepathy, telekinesis and levitation (the latter since in Emerald all of their pokemon are immune to ground types whether by levitate or by being flying-type). Another problem would be how often they use their powers. For instance, how often would the twins talk normally to each other as opposed to using their telepathic powers, especially in private? How often would they use telekinesis to pick up things they could pick up with their hands otherwise?
TheOnlyMoth
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>>23173260 well, they could probably communicate between each other teleparthically, makes things levitate, usual psychic stuff.
Power could be amped up if they are together.
Alternatively have the two go wonder twins route, with Liza turning into a flying type and Tate turning into a bucket of water/water type. That Guy with that One Ashfic !latXRxVvNs
That Guy with that One Ashfic !latXRxVvNs Sat 04 Apr 2015 04:55:02 No. 23173595 Report Quoted By:
>>23173260 I'd imagine that between themselves in private using telepathy would be y habit, it's easier, more private, and cool.
When with other they'd probably shoot each other psychic messages, to keep in sync and all that. But when directly talking to one another they do it out loud, as not to be rude.
Honestly, they'd probably only use telekinesis when showing it off, are lazy, or just can't do it with their arms, moving stuff with your mind probably isn't as precise as our fingers.
Anonymous
>>23173116 Better question: How provocative were you today?
cge0361 !Xatu./qcKY
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>>23173125 >my editor is a lazy idiot, what do I pay him for? Irony, apparently.
Unown
>>23171557 >Breast suckling and lactation Um, you are aware that the female in your pairing isn't a mammal, right? I'm pretty sure that the only breast that could be sucked there wouldn't lactate anything unless something was very, very wrong.
TheOnlyMoth
cge
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>>23173966 It's a lemon. The only logic that must be satisfied is that which promoites the commissioner's knob polishing.
Anonymous
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>>23173966 It's a lemon. The only logic that must be satisfied is that which promotes the commissioner's knob polishing.
SadIdiot !f37barISTA
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>>23173845 Any excuse to use this.
Anonymous
Anonymous
Well, I tried to write more for my story, but it's just a bunch of dead ends in terms of plot. Slice of life is pretty hard.>gym leader is a shut in >communicates with only friend-love interest >insert rest of plot here >gets a girl, breaks up, finds out love interest was what he wanted all along >wins some major tournament I'm seriously stuck on the middle. Thinking I should quit, I kinda intended it to be a medium sized project or whatever. Perhaps I should just go back to writing one-shots.
Anonymous
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>>23174365 For your middle, have you considered the love interest be a challenger, who is forced to stay in the gym overnight due to the gyms remote location and a high power storm. But it later transpires the storm was a ruse by the freind.
Anonymous
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>>23174283 At first I thought I was just missing the context.
Then I clicked the links to the character images. Urgh.
cge0361 !Xatu./qcKY
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>>23174365 What is the moral/message of your story?
>Perhaps I should just go back to writing one-shots. "No! There's no running from a trainer battle!" VS
Another request from the hat! oshawott x cinccino (male - female) it is up to you how it happens, but the cinccino wishes to see how much "juice" she can hold inside of her. She gets oshawott to bloat her full of pee and cum, and the oshawott develops an inability to stop cumming inside her (but there is no popping, I HATE that) Is this okay?
Anonymous
>>23170495 There was one writer
from Tumblr around the threads several weeks ago, but I can't recall if they ever posted the fic they were working on. It was a story with Tabitha as a character, and the writer made the pictures to do a LN-ish thing, or rather just put pictures to give a concrete ground to their words, I didn't quite understand.
Anonymous
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>>23176722 >(but there is no popping, I HATE that) Yeah, that would just be the worst, it'd totally ruin the whole thing. So gross. Good call on his part.
Anonymous
TheOnlyMoth
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>>23176793 yesh, and it's being remade.
New link to the ideabin is over here at
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1X072SSWulcC6RJRrPA6v9XtyohRybvMBl6Fh49wHsRw/edit Right now I'm too lazy to transfer ideas over to the new bin, and it seems more clean to just start a new one. I'll still keep the old list though.
Anonymous
>>23176722 :/
Everything is wrong here...
vulpsis
>>23177432 Not as wrong as this one
M trainer F trainer
holding hands Alba
Not sure if this would be a thing in anything I'll do, but I'm wondering about capturing people in pokeballs. Not for anything kinky, mind you.
TheOnlyMoth
>>23179809 I think BW2 had a Pokestar section about that topic, where Pokemon enslave people and use them like Pokemon in the past.
There's also an oddball copypasta floating around gardevoir threads about a Gardevoir who puts its trainer into a Pokeball out of curiosity.
You can ask around if you want to get more info on that.
I remember in a WBKids bumer where Ash Captures Jackie Chan (actor) in a pokeball. Fun times. Anonymous
Anonymous
>tfw you want to write something really taboo and kinky but think all you'll get in return is looks of pic related
Anonymous
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>>23180716 This is 4chan. If you have something that's taboo and kinky, might as well share it.
Anonymous
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>>23180716 You forgot to shoop in a guy in the window behind the bushes who becomes sweaty with arousal while reading it and will start asking you for moar, but going a little further next time.
Anonymous
>>23180716 It can't possibly be that bad. I'm thinking about writing a fic about futa Roxie fucking her Scolipede and even that's pretty tame to me.
Anonymous
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>haven't been to write threads in years >come in to see how much has changed >See discussion above I want on this ride
Butler !!vQF061dDoa/
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>>23156181 Have I been productive?
Somewhat, but nowhere nearly enough. I have the ideas sorted out, it's getting them down that's been frustrating me.
Anonymous
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>>23182998 >about futa Roxie fucking her Scolipede and even that's pretty tame to me. Tell me that no one, anywhere, considers this taboo or kinky. That shit's vanilla.
Slowsis
>>23176734 Are you talking about this one?
http://archiveofourown.org/works/3127442/chapters/6778160 My friend and I collaborated where I wrote and she illustrated. We chose to use pictures to contribute to the understanding of the content and also to enhance the content in a way we couldn't normally do with words alone. For example, she decided to make all of the pictures
except one in black and white for a reason.
Also, hello writefriends. This semester has killed me, but it's coming to an end so maybe I can finally pop in more often.
Wrote 9 pages today, feels good.
Anyone seen the guy who was writing that entertaining Winona fic a few months ago?
Anonymous
Request: A day in the life of Korrina's Lucario, and his futile attempts to get his trainer to notice him.
Krouscht !!z8uXdT+pD7i
>>23180716 Go ahead and write what you feel, and don't be too ashamed to post it around here. The only reason you'd get those looks around here is if your writing is 12-year-old tier, and that's pretty hard to accomplish.
>>23177432 No fun allowed.
>>23173116 >Productivity >ever >>23156181 Little late to the party to make the welcoming post, but whatever. S'great to be back. Anyways a short suggestion post- for some ideas and thoughts on something that came up a while ago.
Short fluff story idea, there's a lot more to it, but the gist of it is: Guy in frozen part of X region notices something wrong (my idea was: He's the owner of an inn which is well known for its presence of Snorunt, but then the little shits go mysteriously missing, more deets later), goes out and gets caught in a blizzard, gets "saved" by a Froslass, which instead of being a cold killer that displays its trophies is just a lonely soul looking for someone to care for it. Something something (insert fluff here), guy gets saved, makes a companion for life. I'm still working out the details myself, but hey, people like Froslass, right? Thoughts / ideas / suggestions?
Anonymous
>>23179819 I'd be interested in reading that if anyone has it.
cge
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>>23184721 This sounds writable, although it may be difficult to add dimension without donning tired tropes or losing focus.
Anonymous
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>>23184616 >I am a trainer >These are my pokemon >They all want me to notice them >But I never will Anonymous
>>23182998 I want this to be a thing
Pokemaniac G. !!5lyd4F1oWNq
>mfw I planned to write Pokemon this morning and ended up writing Senran Kagura instead I DON'T KNOW WHERE THINGS WENT WRONG.
Anonymous
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>>23186678 There's usually nothing wrong with diversions sometimes. Usually.
>tfw can't motivate self to write research paper for class Anonymous
>Dabble in writefagging >Make a two page or so story based on a nuzlocke run >Can't draw for shit >Realize the thing's filled with holes since the "gimmick" I chose doesn't make any sense >Find writefag thread >Turns out it's mostly porn I ain't even mad.
SadIdiot !f37barISTA
>>23186755 It's not all porn. Feel free to discuss your work or ask for advice on writing/plot/so on and so forth. The porn just stands out more since it's porn.
Anonymous
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>>23184721 >and that's pretty hard to accomplish. You'd be surprised, dude.
Anonymous
>>23187029 Well, it involved taking the story of Emerald and setting it in the Old West, but I couldn't think of a way to Westernize some of the gameplay and story aspects.
Fucking Devon Corp... Anonymous
>>23187648 This might be a stereotype, but you could have the setting base on the odd expansion of that desert route in Emerald to cover the entire region, with people living in areas that are not under constant sandstorm. Buildings change overtime to become more adaptive to the expanded desert (hence where you could probably import some of the westernization) along with the Pokemon
sadly this also comes into the assumption that Groudon was awoken and actually won the battle in the alternate universe Anonymous
>>23187670 Except I've deliberately set the story in the past, without pokeballs and PCs. The gym leaders are now ruthless outlaws, every trainer has to capture pokemon by defeating then gaining their trust, Wally is going to grow into a worse and worse state as the story goes on, ultimately culminating in
him being a withering husk that will die if the psychic powers of his Gardevoir are cut off from him. Maybe I should turn the Devon corp into a tribe of stereotypical natives...
Anonymous
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>>23187694 so basically the Devon Corp is what's holding you back, huh...
If I recall in emerald, they also worked on technology, so they could be a black market group gathering rare metals/making technology and selling it to the gm leader outlaws or anyone at X times the price.
of course anyone who buys at a higher price will be tagged to be robbed by outlaws later on If you want to portray them in a lighter route, maybe they want to try helping people by providing newcomers with basic supplies before going out in the wild?
I'm not sure why devon corp is such a big obstacle for you, but those are my ideas anyway. Create an alternate interpretation of them or just twist things they usually do.
Anonymous
>>23185211 here you go anon, courtesy of the gardevoir thread
http://pastebin.com/bsB0KKPK cge0361 !Xatu./qcKY
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>Have a story half-done. >Figure out what to do with its subplot. >Got it all worked out in mind. >Start Chapter 1 of another story, totally winging it. >How can I possibly think that writing two stories at once is a good idea?
TheOnlyMoth
>received final assignment for computer and software class course >I have to write my own outline of a mystery theme noel >include character sheet >tfw I already have a mystery theme fanfiction plotted in the endless list of things to may/may not do Huh. Who would've thought this is helping my class?
Anonymous
>>23191666 >computer and software class >outline a noel, character sheet I don't see what outlining a noel has to do with computer software.
TheOnlyMoth
>>23191689 fuck, meant Novel.
However, I am being forced to use spreadsheets in Microsoft Access and Excell for character information, plot outlines n' shit. Not to mention create a brochure of advertisement on publisher.
Basically use everything microsoft office provides for final project.
Anonymous
>>23191712 >I am being forced to use Microsoft Worthwhile tasks to do.
These tools are all terrible.
No schadenfreude.
>publisher. In the year of 199X, a super document format named .pub was created. Dr.Gates created Publisher to stop the evil desires of Dr.Adobe. However, after his defeat, Dr.Adobe bought out eight of his competitors to counter Microsoft.
*slow crawl to top of skyscraper*
Mega
Document
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PRESS DELETE
Anonymous
Anonymous
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>>23186678 the hype must have gotten to you.
>>23186618 >tfw someone made this reaction into a 3d model. >>23184363 this brings me back to reading my first chapter books that provided pictures every now and then. Good times.
>>23180661 'cause she's Mr. Vain
>>23162881 This one is actually pretty good. Thanks for the share.
Anonymous
Anonymous
That Guy with that One Ashfic !latXRxVvNs
That Guy with that One Ashfic !latXRxVvNs Wed 08 Apr 2015 04:27:53 No. 23198636 Report Just some ideas the IRC talked about, to get discussion going>The Pokemon equivalent of Angels and Demons Obviously stemming from the monotheistic idea of Arceus, what would the series version of angels and demons be. The chat never reached a conclusive answer but there was a agreement on angels and demons not being a fully realized concepts, with Cresselia and Darkrai being the best translation.>Ghetsis's plan and motivations, BW and BW2. Chat agreed on general unrealistic outcome (what do you expect from this series) but generally agreed on its maliciousness This one is actually from another thread>The treatment of in-world Pokephiles. Legality, public opinion, the conflict, etc. Pic unrelated
Anonymous
>>23198636 >monotheistic idea of Arceus I've yet to see an implementation of that that wasn't lazy unimaginative garbage.
>The treatment of in-world Pokephiles. Legality, public opinion, the conflict, etc. Prerequisite for those questions to mean anything: Clear up the matter of Pokémon sapience and all the implications that follow. The source material tends to ignore those.
Anonymous
>>23198695 >I've yet to see an implementation of that that wasn't lazy I don't know, it's kinda the hand we've been dealt. Creating an alternative origin story will either break canon, just take from some other religious mythos, or just be filled with jargon and such
Anonymous
>>23198747 "Creator god" does not imply monotheism.
Anonymous
>>23198754 what are we talking about monotheism wise, one god with others less powerful beings or only one really powerful universe creating/bending/destroying being with the other being basically unrelated
Anonymous
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>>23198769 >>23198636 implies exclusive monotheism (aka the boring and arguably false interpretation). That Guy with that One Ashfic
>>23198754 Kinda depends on what interpretation of "monotheism" were looking at. Like for my Fic, Arceus was definitely the original Pokemon, created the universe and the creation trio. But beyond that the monotheistic theme stops. For example, several of the legendaries he creates, (the creation trio, weather trio, etc) are also regarded as gods and universe-bending-ly powerful.
Mega Rayquaza or The Original Dragon for example can stand toe to toe with base form Arceus (won't mention beyond that). Is this a monotheistic interpretation because Arceus created the universe and the others?
What about the fact that the creation trio regard Arceus as their "father". Does that tie to the monotheistic idea, or even more specifically, the christian monotheistic way?
Merely dismissing this the idea of Arceus as the one creator because on the surface it's "unoriginal" can lead to the loss of some good ideas, and I think it takes a bit more a careful look to determine whether these ideas are bad or not
Anonymous
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Angels/demons would simply be Pokemon, if we construct a simile. God is to angles/demons are to man as Arceus is to the pokemon he created are to man. Their capacity for action, to do good and evil, and to affect the lives of human beings align quite well. The only functional difference is that humans can command a pokemon that was captured with or without its consent and rely on its efforts, while angels serve God's will alone and demons their own will.
Anonymous
>>23198833 I'm not arguing against the concept of Arceus as the creator. What I'm calling unoriginal is the interpretation of Arceus as equivalent to the Christian God with the serial number filed off.
Canon implies that Arceus was the first god, not the only one.
Anonymous
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>>23198833 That's already not monostheistic. A creator/primordial deity has a place within a pantheon, and that's that.
>>23198695 >I've yet to see an implementation of that that wasn't lazy unimaginative garbage. This. It's all really fucking stupid.
That Guy with that One Ashfic
>>23198878 Okay but what about what you call "god". Is it fine if Arceus is the most powerful of the god? What if all the other gods (Giratina, Palkia, etc) were directly created from him?
When does god lose its definition, at least for you
Anonymous
>>23198896 To me, "god" implies "supernatural being with powers beyond ordinary inhabitants of the mortal realm". The existence of a divine hierarchy does not contradict the concept of a god.
That Guy with that One !latXRxVvNs
>>23198917 So would you think say, my idea of the divine Hierarchy, would be an original concept?
Anonymous
>>23198937 Not original, but close to the canon.
My point isn't so much "innovation or gtfo", it's more like "stop reducing Pokémon's pantheon to a palette swap of Christianity".
Anonymous
>>23198952 >stop reducing Pokémon's pantheon to a palette swap of Christianity T H I S
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At least ripoff... fuck, Shinto? Hinduism? Those have far more influences in Japanese culture and are going to feel a lot more fitting. Where do you think spear pillar got its name? What animal do you think Arceus is?
Anonymous
Anonymous
Pokemaniac G. !!5lyd4F1oWNq
Hey thread.I'm out. I'm so bored of writing Pokemon that the idea of doing it bums me out. Anything else Pokemon-related I do are requests that have built up over time. I know you don't give two shits but since the thread's just discussion, but I just thought I'd say something. I still have a tumblr if you wanna keep up with my other stuff. I'm working on Senran Kagura (Ryona story) and Smash Bros stuff at the moment. Peace.
Anonymous
>>23199316 >Senran Kagura (Ryona story) Anonymous
>>23199316 >I'm working on Senran Kagura (Ryona story) Well I can safely say I'm glad you're not doing Pokemon anymore. Do us a favor and don't come back, yeah?
Anonymous
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>>23199334 ...is this reverse psychology?
Anonymous
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>>23199334 >disliking Ryona Don't touch me you filthy casual
Anonymous
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>>23199318 well, with a series that revolves around clothing damage it was bound to happen eventually.
>>23199197 themoreyouknow.jpg
>>23198629 Even if it is soundfont, I like gen III music, especially the kanto trainer battle theme
Anonymous
>>23199334 At least have the balls to put your trip on.
What's next, "do us a favor and never come back to the IRC"?
Anonymous
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>>23199389 errr anon? I don't think this guy came from the irc...
Anonymous
>>23199316 >Senran Kagura plebeian as fuck
Anonymous
>>23199334 >>23200144 Wow, no wonder people leave and don't come back.
Anonymous
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>>23200635 Well Senran IS pretty terrible. I probably would've jumped on him too if the ryona slant didn't salvage it.
Anonymous
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>>23200635 What exactly do you expect? You can't have a 0% asshole quota anywhere on 4chan.
Saikou !!N1ZuL/4CLu1
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>>23199316 Well that's pretty bogus, but it's not like I didn't see it coming. Best of luck in future endeavors, G!
And don't let those shitposters leave a bad taste in your mouth, either. Anonymous
>>23200635 Isn't this the third time he's quit forever in the last year?
Anonymous
>>23200945 First time was that duran and lyraeon shit.
Second time was I don't remember, something about work
This time is "actually done" and I partially can believe this one.
Anonymous
>>23201406 I think the second time also involved being tired with Pokemon, but some requester got him back to it shortly after.
>>23200635 G is often stalked by shitters, just remember that.
>>23199040 I always though Arceus was a GOAT for a sacrifice.
>>23198833 question, if someone were to create life outside of Arceus's eye/power, how would he react?
>>23198636 Ash VS Clemont episode is basically pic related though, so anyone making fanfiction on that scene could easily say screw the rules I have money for it.
Anonymous
>>23201637 Well that already happened (in my canon), outside of the legendaries, Mew created all of the other Pokemon in existence, and even some legendaries were created by other legendaries. Groudon made Heatran, Palkia made Jirachi and Hoopa, etc etc
And he was even fine with Mewtwo, a pokemon created by humans themselves and Deoxys, a pokemon made from space virus stuff
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That Guy with that One Ashfic !latXRxVvNs Wed 08 Apr 2015 18:27:22 No. 23201658 Report Quoted By:
>>23201656 this is that guy btw
Vulpsis
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>>23199316 It's a shame to see you go but remember you are welcomed to the IRC if you need help with writing itself!
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That Guy with that One Ashfic !latXRxVvNs Wed 08 Apr 2015 19:11:21 No. 23201905 Report Quoted By:
Anonymous
>>23201406 lyra's ego on tumblr is big as farla's, what happened?
Anonymous
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>>23202972 we don't know and we'll never know anon. That is a mystery all on its own.
Homestuck happened Butler !!vQF061dDoa/
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>>23202972 I'll leave it up to G if he wants to discuss details, but let's just say it's pretty ugly and he wasn't the only one who got it.
Anonymous of Massachusetts !NoraVXgoIM
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https://www.fanfiction.net/s/11093576/2/The-City-of-Secret-Bases Second chapter of my story about Winona becoming Fortree's gym leader up. And it only took a month.
Anonymous
>>23198747 Are people really concerned with the canon?
I've never really been a fan of the concept of 'god' pokemon. Having arbitrarily powerful characters in a story somehow unappealing, even if it makes the scale of a story seem broader. While having legendaries be extremely strong or have some special abilities or role in the world can allow them to bring interesting dynamics into the story, simply making them literal gods is uncreative and limiting.
I'd much rather see a story about a Rattata hell-bent on making the world recognize his species' worth through some crazy machinations to spread chaos than yet another story about how the unbeatable Giratina, lord of darkness and dickishness, intends to engulf the world in darkness while only our protagonist can rally the legendaries to combat him.
Anonymous
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>>23204704 >a Rattata hell-bent on making the world recognize his species' worth through some crazy machinations They're Joey and The Brain, yes Joey and The Brain.
One is top percentage, the other is a pain.
With shorts easy to wear, the E-lite Four they'll dare.
They're Joey, they're Joey and The Brain brain brain brain brain...
Anonymous
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>>23204704 I always kinda thought that the legendary weren't gods and that most of the myths were just myths
then again I never bothered with the anime so whatever Anonymous
http://pastebin.com/G7L7w5EQ Newfag here.
Should I continue?
Tell me what I did wrong. Anonymous
Has anyone read a fic about Red traveling with some chick? I can't remember the title or much detail, but there's one scene where he stops a trainer from whipping his absol and they take it to the pokemon center.
Anonymous
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>>23204872 It leaves me a bit curious as to who "they" are.
Narration somewhat feels all over the place. For example, Line 20 could easily be placed in line 14. A bit of organization for narration and it should be good for whatever you plan on working with.
That Guy with that One Ashfic !latXRxVvNs
That Guy with that One Ashfic !latXRxVvNs Thu 09 Apr 2015 03:53:45 No. 23204971 Report Quoted By:
>>23204872 Okay. First thing, formatting. The first line should have a skipped line before the next paragraph, and the part about the nightmares should be separate from walking up. I won't point out more about formatting, just know it need help.
Next, stop on Sil and intro him more before continuing.
>the new toy has an ultrasound whistle in it. Said Ninetales is in the kithcen, busy squeezing every bit of 'noise' he can get from said toy. This line needs some help. First, you can't say said ninetales, because ninetales wasnt mentioned in the line before. Next, you say 'is probably" because there is no sign that sil is guaranteed to be there. at least to your main character (who hasnt has his name introduced at this point btw.
Try to add a bit of a transition between the bedroom and the kitchen.
Way way too many names for the first few paragraphs, trying to keep in my heads a bit diffuicult
Over all it's pretty good, I'd recommend more description on interior, more cementing of what species each character is too.
for a first try 7.5/10
interested it where it's going
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>>23204883 Can you be a little more specific? There's only one fic I can think of that features a Trainer rescuing an Absol, and it's not Red, and also your chances of finding the one I'm thinking of are slim to none nowadays.
cge0361 !Xatu./qcKY
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>>23204872 Narration seems to be out of sync with the events that are happening. You can drop a name and not explain it immediately, but if you do that, ensure that the next time the name comes up the character is established. You're dropping a name, taking a step, and then Narrator shows up late with exposition, sometimes apparently just to break up the dialogue. That's three perspective shifts when you should afford yourself only one.
You're hiding species establishment unnecessarily and apparently deliberately but for no advantage. First, when you say "Sil" instead of "my Ninetales, Sil," and again when you permit anime name-talking but only use half of the species name, which is enough for pros but can delay comprehension in casuals. (A confused reader quits reading unless the reader is already curious.)
The narration is in present tense, but you're writing your narrator's voice as the protagonist with priviledged information that only makes sense in past tense.
If Protag got back from Hoenn and the now Sceptile is his starter, then he left whichever region he's from (and went back to) to begin his journey in Hoenn?
Anonymous
>>23199316 that pic is more depressing than the fact you're moving on from pokemon fandom.
if it ever gets localized, would you consider doing some of the female monsters in youkai watch? Anonymous
Title:
Black and White Alternate
Summary:
Ash ventures into the the Unova region for a chance to participate in the Ventress Conference. What awaits him are new friends, old rivals, a sinister organization, ancient legendaries, mega evolutions and the Pokémon World Tournament. Being bound to the fates of the Heroes of Truth and Ideals, the boy must rely on his past experiences to make it on through.
Link:
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1gBmcHs9ZlVoI9IvhLtS_D7iFYwJlrV8fRFZtGiuI-CY/edit?usp=sharing Need help on:
1) Flow- Is a scene boring? Is someone out-of-character? Is an action/situation non-sensible?
Where and how should I change:
· Tone of Voice
· Choice of Words
· Facial Expression
· Body Language
2) Structure- Is a paragraph awkward to read? Is there too much repetition?
Where and how should I change:
· Verbs
· Adjectives
· Other Grammar
· Spelling
Any other suggestions?
All help is appreciated.
Thanks!
Pokemaniac G. !!5lyd4F1oWNq
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>>23205778 Thanks for caring.
Youkai Watch is being localized and released in the US in 2016 according to news on Nintendo news sites, so ask me then.
Or I could just watch the anime, it's probably subbed by now.
Anonymous
Bump with a question. If a fossil pokemon remained conscious in its fossil state, what would it be thinking up to the point it gets revived?
Anonymous
Remember a long time ago during the writethread tournament there was speculation about a possible NSFW Pokedex entry contest? Although there is no contest today, someone was kind enough to give it a shot.
Thus, the Beginner's Guide to Mating Rituals began.
http://pastebin.com/X2HUhmKP Hella NSFW.
I don't know if more will come or not.and it's not in order sadly.
Caution: Gulpin/Swalot Entry contains softvore Butler !!vQF061dDoa/
>>23209153 I'm not sure I entirely understand what you mean.
Anonymous
/r/ NSFW story involved Male Trainer x F Heliolisk x F Sceptile... :^)
Anonymous
>>23209787 Why the meme face, pard?
Anonymous
>>23209957 it's one of the mysteries of /vp/, though I guess anything with that ":^)" face is not meant to be taken seriously.
So maybe it's just a modern sage?
Anonymous
>>23210012 >not meant to be taken seriously (ALT+TAB, ALT+F4, SHIFT+DEL)
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>>23210042 see what I mean?
>>23209451 This...is kinda interesting. A bit gross but interesting.
That Guy with that One Ashfic !latXRxVvNs
That Guy with that One Ashfic !latXRxVvNs Thu 09 Apr 2015 22:22:15 No. 23210513 Report Quoted By:
>>23205809 Now this is up my alley.
Give me a bit. I'll have a look over in a bit
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Whelp, published chapter last night. Can't tell whether or not the flow is slow but acceptable or outright abysmal and snore-inducing since there's fairly little action this time around.
>https://www.fanfiction.net/s/11084689/5/Fledglings >http://archiveofourown.org/works/3465593/chapters/8210111 Oh well, I guess I'll find out soon enough what my readers think about it.
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That Guy with that One Ashfic !latXRxVvNs Thu 09 Apr 2015 23:44:25 No. 23211040 Report Quoted By:
>>23205809 I've posted this on the Doc as well.
All in all, I give it a 8.5/10. The descriptions are great, the battles are good, the characters are colorful.
You need work on Ash's character and dialogue, understand that Ash is simple but likeable, and also very confident. Try to show that here and in newer chapters.
Your use of real life settings and cultures are also a bit out of place and I recommend you Poke-ize it.
Good job, I'm interested into seeing where this goes.
Anonymous
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>>23204872 Let's give this another shot. At least it's longer. I think I tried to cram too much into too little the first time, so I hope it's better now.
http://pastebin.com/pNCEa7E2 Anonymous
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>>23209510 He's asking if fossil pokemon can still think when they're a fossil (Think Omanyte in Helix Fossil).
Anonymous
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Does anyone have a fic that explores the mind of the insane in general?
Anonymous
>>23209153 Probably gone insane from years of isolation
Also, why does everyone think pokemon are 'revived' from their fossils? They're cloned. That's how it's speculated to be doable in real life. Extract DNA, try and clone a live baby. That Old Amber sure isn't a Aerodactyl fossil, it's either got a mosquito that sucked an Aerodactyl's blood or some piece if an Aerodactyl got stuck inside.
Anonymous
Hey y'all. I don't normally frequent these threads but just happened to browse through the pending request lists this morning and figured I'd do something up super quick.
http://pastebin.com/Sz7CDBMH Very NSFW, it's trainer-on-Frillish smut Anonymous
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>>23215766 I was gonna say I've fapped to weirder things, but you know, I really don't know if I have. Good job I guess? I mean like it was pretty well written but wow.
TheOnlyMoth
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>>23215766 >http://pastebin.com/Sz7CDBMH >someone beat me to frillish thing MOTHER F-
I was too slow :^(
This week wont stop bullying me Oh well, I'll still work on mine, and at least now I don't have to do the
NTR version Anonymous
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>>23215064 >tfw Aerodactyl could have had DNA from another creature intertwined with it >tfw you realzie that Aerodactyl was made from two pokemon They have already tried out fusion.
Anonymous
If any of you new aspiring writers want an example of ruining a story by writing it a little too much like a high school essay?
Here's your chance
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/6701508/1/Pokemon-Heroes-Uprising I will warn you, it's edgy, frustrating, and overly long. But it would get an A+ with a grammar nazi.
Tread carefully
Vulpsis
Another review, most of mine consists of these short requests. make a rape for f braixan x m gallade
Anonymous
>>23215766 I like the idea and it works well for me, although the Frillish seemed to act a lot like one of those wives that just lays there and take it. No complaints, limited interaction, the whole works. You could easily replace Frillish with some kind of deluxe
onahole if you wanted to. Was this your intent?
cge0361 !Xatu./qcKY
>>23219526 >it would get an A+ with a grammar nazi. Let's see about that.
>No government, no rebellion, no savage nor any pest with an attitude will change that. 1) Missing comma.
2) Inappropriate "nor"; "and no pest…"
>The raging sea of inferno generated by malice, desire, and corruption will rise. 3) Use of definite article for a noun that doesn't yet exist.
>Welcome Professor Oak. >welcome back Professor. 4, 5) Missing commas.
>The world of Pokemon has always prospered for years. 6) "Has always" indicates a state limited only by span of existence. "Has…for years" indicates a subset of that period.
>With Pokemon willing…(sentence). 7) Needs commas for clarity.
8) Word choice suggests three groups of sapient life forms but only declares Pokemon and Human Beings broadly. Clarify.
>Pokemon have grown extremely obedient of humans 9) "…toward humans."
>with the death of Latios and among other legends alike. 10) This happens when somebody is writing and somebody else applies a 9v battery to a sweet spot on the writer's brain.
>There was one thing that perked the scientists and investigators' interests 11) "Piqued" means to acutely arouse. "Perked" means to stiffen and straighten.
>It seemed that something had to be done 12) It seemed to whom? The parties in combat are already doing something.
>a corporation specializing in military products and combat and compromised of the best soldiers >compromised of the best soldiers >compromised F−.
/done before the first horizontal line.
Anonymous
Anonymous
>>23221348 I said Grammar Nazi, not Grammar Stalin
Anonymous
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>>23220822 To a point, yes, actually, it was. In a world without pokemon that's what his girlfriend would have gotten for him (I've seen clear ones) but in this particular scenario, since there was something more robust readily available....
Anonymous
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>>23220523 >the struggle is real Butler !!vQF061dDoa/
>>23222548 If he's anything, CGE is tough but he is fair.
Anonymous
>>23226393 Speaking of which, wasn't there this small fic posted here where Alain does lewd things to Manon? What happened to it? Butler !!vQF061dDoa/
>>23226439 It's one of G's if you're thinking of what I think you are. Don't know where it is now.
Anonymous
>>23226439 I think only a preview was released. It was never completed.
The curse of previews strike again
TheOnlyMoth
>>23228038 That...is more like a GOAT from hell.
Anonymous
>>23229842 Combining "goat" and "from hell" doesn't distinguish anything.
TheOnlyMoth
>>23229939 whup, was replying more to the pic than the post.
Anonymous
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>>23212205 >wingjob Creative. Wish it was a bit longer though
That Guy with that One Ashfic !latXRxVvNs
That Guy with that One Ashfic !latXRxVvNs Mon 13 Apr 2015 01:50:19 No. 23233106 Report You know who here, with my Bi-threadly suggestions post. As we know by now, I'm doing an anime fanfiction where Ash finally stands face to face with his own mediocrity and strives to face it. He leaves the Kalos region and one month trips to the past five regions to try and wrap up a lot of old promises and to find himself, before returning to Kalos to finish the league. I have the plot frame put in place but I'm wondering what you guys would want to see in a fanfic like this. Keep in mind these plot points are already planned.
http://pastebin.com/CrAwnyE8 As always is there anything that you guys would like to see out of the Anime that would only ever come to pass in Fanfic form?
Night March Guy !jLgQm10tTI
>>23233106 Misty getting her bike back.
That Guy with that One Ashfic !latXRxVvNs
That Guy with that One Ashfic !latXRxVvNs Mon 13 Apr 2015 02:47:08 No. 23233455 Report >>23233404 Funny, but she already got her bike back after johto, but I could put in a gag of sorts, like her getting a new really good bike for it to be destroyed by the first chapter she's introduced
Night March Guy !jLgQm10tTI
>>23233455 what episode did she get it back? never watched the anime regularly enough.
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That Guy with that One Ashfic !latXRxVvNs Mon 13 Apr 2015 02:51:09 No. 23233475 Report Quoted By:
>>23233463 The very last Johto episode, when Ash Misty and brock split up.
EP273: Gotta Catch Ya Later!
Anonymous
Anonymous
>>23234653 Still just a preview tho Anonymous
>>23234776 and that's probably all it'll ever be if you read up the thread Anonymous
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>>23234955 D-Damn it. Where do I get my Edgelord x loli smut now? Anonymous
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>>23234955 shit are there any other fics with mairin in it
Anonymous
The poke-theism/Arceus discussion midthread makes me want to try and write some kind of abridged Genesis parallel for Pokemon but I feel like it's been done before. Maybe Pokemon-themed Book of Revelations detailing the split between Pokemon and mankind would be more interesting.
Anonymous
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>>23236331 Go for it. I'm interested to read it
Anonymous
>>23236331 >let's make yet another uninpsired lazy Abrahamic copypaste Anonymous
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>>23236386 That's why I said the first idea was overdone.
Anonymous
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>>23236386 Seriously, read the post before replying
Mistress Hand
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>>23236331 >abridged Genesis https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=vtUpWihJJJ4 sorry I can't think of abridged things the same way ever again
Night March Guy !jLgQm10tTI
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live damn you, LIVE!
Mistress Hand
may I ask what is the common word count for fanfics in general around here?
Anonymous
>>23241971 I've generally seen a range of about two to ten thousand words per chapter. As for overall wordcount, it basically just depends whether you've told all you need to tell.
Anonymous
>>23242375 >ten thousand words per chapter This screams "tryhard" to me. It's Pokemon.
Anonymous
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>>23242758 You're in the fanfiction thread, aka Autism General in the eyes of most others. Why would someone putting effort into it count as too much?
Also, the idea that anything Pokémon just doesn't deserve effort is why we keep getting games that deliver worse singleplayer experiences than SNES RPGs despite ever-decreasing technological limitations.
SadIdiot !f37barISTA
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>>23242758 I try very hard.
Anonymous
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>>23241971 >>23242375 I'd actually advise against super long chapters because it's likely to intimidate potential readers.
I wouldn't recommend passing 5k in a single chapter, especially the introductory chapter in a fic. People are more willing to read ten 3k word chapters than three 10k chapters.
Anonymous
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>>23242758 that only works if its a one-shot
cge0361 !Xatu./qcKY
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>>23241971 Don't worry too much about it. If you engage the reader, it will be fulfilling at 3k or 13k.
That said, I consider 4k about right for a single plot line and plot event, 6k to 8k if I have two major scenes and some side-story. Above 10k, it's either a complete short story or it's giving significant development to multiple plots.
For LL, I targeted 10k for chapters but I split them into halves for a more-regular update frequences and more update bumps. ;D Anonymous
wew, managed to write a whopping 299 words today tomorrow I'll strive for 300
Anonymous
>>23245902 You know, I'm not sure if it is better to write 100 to 300 words a day or 4000 to 8000 in a single sitting every week or two
Anonymous
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>>23245984 I tend to write 200-300 words every 3-4 days, mainly because I've been lazy and uninspired.
I'd say smaller chunks is better regardless because you sort of self-regulate them better and it ends up being higher quality.
Anonymous
>>23157303 here again.So, I'm a total newb to pokemon fics, and I think the only one I've read was Unknown Dungeons.
What would you say are some cliche's I should stay away from in writing pokemon fanfiction?
Anonymous
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>>23247779 A major thing is not to rush when writing, else it will show.
That and avoid unnecessary skipping
Anonymous
>>23247779 You're writing a story told in text form, not a videogame script. Many writers make the mistake of trying to convert the game into writing 1:1. Typical examples include: generic opening scenes that everyone familiar with Pokémon has seen a dozen times, treating characters who grew up in that world the way the game treats the player, battles that have no impact to them because they just happen for the sake of having a battle, taking videogame abstractions literally with no effort to explain them in-universe.
Also, don't be afraid to have the protagonist start out with prior experience. Your readers aren't playing an RPG, they're reading a story; there is no need to depict the entire noob-to-master road unless you're doing something interesting with it.
I could link an in-your-face demonstration of several bad/overused cliches but it's from a writer who's essentially the Devil of the Pokémon fanfic community (and not without valid reasons) and I don't want any regulars thinking I'm one of her agents.
Anonymous
>>23247856 Well, I was thinking of doing a 'OC member of Team Rocket with a Wynaut, and the OC is trying to usurp Giovanni's position as leader.'
I'm probably going to show the MC directing grunts, since the way I imagined him to be is slightly high up in the chain of command. He's not a grunt, but he's not quite an Admin either. I don't quite know what personality I'll give to him. but I want him to be a fairly amicable guy.
Anonymous
>>23247883 It'd be interesting to see how Team Rocket could actually work (considering the source material depicts them as colossal morons). That includes both interal structure and the environment the organization operates in.
The biggest pitfalls I've seen in that area are TR acting like cartoon villains and people in general being just complete idiots.
Anonymous
>>23247912 The way I want to portray them is that while a lot of them a sorta dickish, a surprising majority joined due to financial problems/seeing Team Rocket members around town, and being in awe of the power they seemed to hold over normal civilians.
I also wanted to add a bit where if you already have pokemon when you join, depending on the species, it'll be taken from you and you'll be supplied with a typical grunt mon. The only way to get your pokemon back is to rise in the ranks, which is made difficult since most of the high brass are total dicks.
The only idiots I'll have is the Team Rocket trio, who are only kept around since their antics distract from the real money making Team Rocket does. That one admin will be kinda idiotic too...the one who does disguises.
Anonymous
>>23247928 >The way I want to portray them is that while a lot of them a sorta dickish, a surprising majority joined due to financial problems/seeing Team Rocket members around town, and being in awe of the power they seemed to hold over normal civilians. That sounds reasonable. Money and power are perfectly logical reasons to join a criminal organization if you're that sort of person.
>I also wanted to add a bit where if you already have pokemon when you join, depending on the species, it'll be taken from you and you'll be supplied with a typical grunt mon. The only way to get your pokemon back is to rise in the ranks, which is made difficult since most of the high brass are total dicks. See, this is the sort of idiocy that gets a major crime syndicate wiped out by an 11-year-old.
>Team Rocket trio, who are only kept around since their antics distract from the real money making Team Rocket does So basically your world runs on the exact same nonsense as the anime?
First, if law enforcement is incompetent/nonexistant enough that the anime clowns don't compromise it, they aren't needed as a distraction. I don't see how a successful criminal organization could actually tolerate soldiers this terrible.
Second, the TRio has a talking Meowth. Implication: Pokémon are sapient. That's a major worldbuilding variable with massive consequences and it's easy to screw it up. The source material doesn't handle it in any consistent or logical way, with the games and pokespe mostly ignoring the question and the anime doing whatever fits the plot of the day. Most fanfiction handles it just as badly.
Third, copypasting the TRio drags all the other anime nonsense they're connected to into it. Good luck untangling that.
Anonymous
>>23247976 >See, this is the sort of idiocy that gets a major crime syndicate wiped out by an 11-year-old. True enough. It's mainly because the admins don't want some guy with a kickass team to join and possibly incite a usurpation. They give the Grunts weak pokemon, enough to get the job done but not strong enough to pose a threat to the higher ups.
As for the Team Rocket trio, you're right. That was literally the only explanation I could have for them being there, though to be fair I was considering bringing in anime plots.
Anonymous
>>23247986 >It's mainly because the admins don't want some guy with a kickass team to join and possibly incite a usurpation. They give the Grunts weak pokemon, enough to get the job done but not strong enough to pose a threat to the higher ups. That doesn't sound reasonable. First, if a cybered-up assault rifle ace wants to join your gang you don't rip the tech out of him and hand him a knife. Second, what kind of lousy idiot wannabe mafia falls apart if one guy decides to go berserk? They live in a world where magical monsters are common, they need to have actual contingencies against that sort of thing.
The answer to "how do I ensure loyalty of newbie wizards" is to make it clear you have enough firepower to take them down if they act out, not to confiscate their spellbooks.
I don't think too many non-shit trainers would join if that meant having to start from scratch.
Anonymous
>>23248017 Makes sense. Alright, I'll go with suggestions than. I'm still undecided if I should go off the anime or my own world.
Anonymous
>>23248068 You want your story to make sense. That means you'll be creating your "own world" no matter what canon you use as the base.
That Guy with that One Ashfic !latXRxVvNs
That Guy with that One Ashfic !latXRxVvNs Wed 15 Apr 2015 11:03:13 No. 23248218 Report >>23247928 Regarding team rocket, having them merely take ours pokemon away until youre good enough contradicts the methods of an affective criminal organization and will lead to issues regarding people joining. Rather have it that people with more powerful pokemon join a higher starting rank, and people with truly rare pokemon get them confiscated. This is the mafia, being together doesn't mean you don't get fucked over. Acknowledge that those members are also in a stuck position. What are they going to do? Tell the police the nearly uncatchable team rocket GPS type pokemon After you tried to join?
Also, team rocket trio doesn't have to be incompetent top the point they also have their jobs as a distraction. They legitimately bring results LIke Unova pokemon, the forces of nature plot, and goivanni has seen the incredible power behind Pikachu, stop he allows the team to continue in pursuit
Anonymous
>>23248218 I like to believe the Team Rocket main three are actually very competent while offscreen, it wouldn't make sense otherwise.
Anonymous
>>23248559 >it wouldn't make sense otherwise The execs in charge of the anime don't care whether it makes sense.
That Guy with that One Ashfic !latXRxVvNs
That Guy with that One Ashfic !latXRxVvNs Wed 15 Apr 2015 12:55:26 No. 23248570 Report >>23248568 Saikou is that you?
Anonymous
>>23248570 No, disliking the anime for its obvious flaws is not exclusive to one person.
Anonymous
>>23248570 The anime literally makes no sense outside a few of the movies because it has to be dumbed down for kids. This is non-debatable.
Anonymous
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>>23248087 pretty much this. There are fanfics that revolve around anime, games, or even spinoffs, but really good fics tend to create their own interpretation of events, which often means stepping out of those boundaries
Saikou !!N1ZuL/4CLu1
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>>23248570 Surprise: I'm not the only one who dislikes the anime.
Anonymous
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>>23248570 >implying anyone with taste likes the anime Anonymous
>calling it an anime >>>/padt/ Anonymous
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>>23249509 You forgot to post the screenshot.
That Guy with that One Ashfic !latXRxVvNs
That Guy with that One Ashfic !latXRxVvNs Wed 15 Apr 2015 18:59:17 No. 23249920 Report Quoted By:
>>23248588 >>23248718 I'd like to formally apologize for what I said.
I'm so used to cynicalism regarding the anime that I reacted out of habit rather than reason. I hope this doesn't change your opinion or outlook of me.
Anonymous
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I remember reading a short snippet here about an Aggron getting BTFO'd by a Gardevor after deciding to be a dick and slap around the gardevoir's trainer. Anyone have a link to that specific chapter?
Anonymous
>>23247779 https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=MR7uaIFVFiM This explains the do's and dont's of writing (ala cliches). Mostly don'ts. It is a bit exaggerated and sarcastic, but you should be able to get the message. Well, most of the time anyway
Anonymous
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>>23252812 Not him, but thanks for the tip, anon.
Anonymous
Anonymous
I really need some sort of MeyerxSycamore smut, please.
Anonymous
>>23254730 Sycamore looks like a bottom
Anonymous
>>23254741 Well that's not surprising, find someone who looks like they could top a beefcake like Meyer.
Anonymous
>>23247779 make sure your protagonist isn't a teenage male who is on an adventure to save the world
Anonymous
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>>23254741 >>23254776 Well, of course. I'm the one who requested
>>23254730 , I'd love to see Meyer topping, maybe some use of the cloth. A gag, perhaps?
Anonymous
>>23254800 >plot where villain takes over the world because no teenage male decided to go on an adventure to save the world >story focuses on the actual difficulties of managing a world that one actually takes over >villain wants to quit, but can't because no one wants to take his position. >villain goes insane and decides to make himself a hero alter ego. ...pen and pencil please.
Anonymous
>>23255718 That's basically 'Megamind' without the cheese. Sorry to burst your bubble.
Anonymous
Anonymous
>>23256362 you could still go with the idea though. Don't let the fact that someone did it already stop you in your track.
Night March Guy !jLgQm10tTI
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>>23258056 >>23256362 You just have to do it BETTER than they did. Or pretend it never happened.
Anonymous
Does anyone have a HumanXPokemon ROMANCE fic? No Sex, no one chapter fucks, just a nice romance between a trainer a his Pokemon. Preferably with a female Absol.
Night March Guy !jLgQm10tTI
Anonymous
>>23258844 I think ThatGuyWithTheOneAshFic did a christmas special with Ash and Latias, butthe catalog seems lacking in that.
...sounds like something writers should fill up on.
That Guy with that One Ashfic !latXRxVvNs
That Guy with that One Ashfic !latXRxVvNs Fri 17 Apr 2015 02:35:53 No. 23259063 Report >>23259006 >>23258844 That I did. Far warning however, it is an anime fic, features a bit of an autistic ship, has an un godly cheesy title, and I never finished fine tuning the editing. Enjoy none the less.
Anonymous
>>23259063 >insert missing link here >>23258844 there was also an odd-shot involving a male trainer and roserade, though he never finished what he started.
http://pastebin.com/LZZgNx0A I recall there being stories about that first success date pic as well, but they are long gone.
The vespiquen one ended badly when the MC decided to ding dong the stinger That Guy with that One Ashfic !latXRxVvNs
That Guy with that One Ashfic !latXRxVvNs Fri 17 Apr 2015 02:43:50 No. 23259141 Report Anonymous
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>>23259127 The Roserade thing was nice, even if it needed more develop
Anonymous
>>23259141 This is a bit long for me right now
I'll pick it up in the morning
Anonymous
Anonymous
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>>23260481 >She wanted the D >She CRAVED THE D >She could have turned into a human woman >"M-Muh morals!" Fuck.
Anonymous
>>23258844 also see
>>23171027 Sorry I couldn't find any with Absol that met your description.
Anonymous
>>23258844 I support this notion wholely. I love reading sweet tales of interspecies loyalty, respect and, as stale as that word may sound, bonds that the two sides can have.
I could write that kind of thing, but I need to know what people would like to see. Also, I feel like sharing a quote I only partially remember that I feel could apply to conflict.
"You reap what you sow, and your actions can have consequences. Force answers force, hate breeds hate and death only brings death. If we are to break this vicious cycle, we must do more than act without any thought or doubt."
Anonymous
>>23263048 That quote sounds like something I heard from playing Beowulf the game.
I think he is looking for something that gives him those fuzzy feelings, like back when you were a kid and seeing a kiss made you all giddy inside.
So maybe go for cute/adorable.
>>23258844 'Frost' in the archive has something likethis, though it needs some spellchecking upon the fated encounter and will probably have more chapters coming soon.
Anonymous
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>>23263078 It's actually slightly modified Metro 2033 quote.
Anonymous
>>23259402 >>23259141 It's okay, not really into the anime myself and I can see you probably have a lot of back story behind this that. That probably would have helped.
>>23262076 It was... Ok, not exactly a fan of the whole "Big Girl" thing
>>23263048 Personally, I looking for something I can get into for a decent number of chapters. Some build up, the connection, dealing with what comes afterward. The afterward is what I want particularly, figuring out how the relationship would work in public and that whole "Oh yeah, I'm dating a Pokemon" feeling the trainer gets. Also, like I said, a female absol would be nice, but you can do what ever you want.
Anonymous
Request NSWF F Breloom x M Trainer or F Heliolisk x M Trainer
TheOnlyMth
>>23264405 I'm pretty sure someone already asked for this in
>>23209787 and I already placed it in the ideabin. Now you just have to wait for someone to take it.
Until then, please wait and rerorero some cherries.
TheOnlyMoth
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>>23264977 >forgetting the o in my name Motherf-
>>23259127 >The Flowers I wonder if the author of this is still around...
Dream
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>>23263078 >>23264288 Yep definitely needs lots of work. an expanding of the night. and as you pointed out, an expanding of the connection and all that gooey sweet stuff
Mistress Hand
I am just about done with the introductury arc. I have another question though. In Popstar, anything can choose to talk if it wants to. If the main character's pokemon were to enter Floralia, I want to break that weird language barrier. Should I have them be able to talk outright by accident or ease them into speaking (they learn how to talk)?
Anonymous
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>>23265851 Outright, but with initial chaos and wierdness
Anonymous
Been a long time since I've been to these threads, but I actually have a certain request that involves editing another certain fic. But a bit skeptical on requesting it because it involves diaperfur.
Anonymous
>>23266278 Is it Braixen's little problem? That's the first thing I think of based on your request Anonymous
>>23266287 Nah it doesn't involve a Braixen at all.
Anonymous
>>23266293 well in any case, you could tell us or not. I don't think the owner of the idea bin discriminates ideas
Anonymous
>>23266301 Again, it involves an already existing story, and it's "innocent" and should still remain mostly that way despite the changes to it. The pokemon in it is portrayed is pretty young.
Should I still make the request? Anonymous
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Found this old creation myth I wrote somewhere. Just figured I'd post it here. In the beginning, there was only Arceus. The Original One, asleep and dreaming. First he dreamt of Truth, and Reshiram was born. Second, he dreamt of Ideals, and Zekrom was borm. He dreamt of a murky third, but it could not exist without the melding of the two disparate brothers, who could do nothing but fight for supremacy. From Reshiram came Groudon and from Zekrom came Kyogre, who fought one another as their father-mothers did, creating the world from Earth and Water. When they had fought enough and tired, resting after cataclysmic battle, their Third could come about and give air as Rayquaza, though existence could not truly happen yet. From Reshiram came about Dialga, and the first moment in time was born. Dialga was unbound and free, and with it Time did not have any meaning, for it flowed wherever it wished without reason. Existence however had a small bit of meaning now, and other beings could take some shape, though they still had little reason or clarity. Reshiram saw this Truth, and it was good. Mere concepts could not truly exist in existence, so as Time was born Reshiram fell deep asleep and faded away. Zekrom, however, wanted more. He had Ideals he wanted to implement, and so in his own final moments, Zekrom begat Palkia and sent him to destroy Truth.
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Palkia sought Dialga out had did terrible battle with him. Dialga's heart was torn out and planted deep within the world, where it would forever beat, while Dialga would be trapped and no longer could he move as he liked. As his final act of vengeance, Dialga roared at Palkia, tearing out his lungs and burying it with him. The victory ultimately belonged to Palkia, however, as his breathing would add to the beat of Dialga's heart, solidifying the space and time around them, imprisoning Dialga forever with him. Their Third, Giratina, was once again born like Rayquaza before it, but was kept at bay as his Mother-Fathers were imprisoned, and him with them. In the new emptiness, Truth and Ideals once again gave birth to new beings. With the world made, and space-time stable, Xerneas could take form and fill the world with life. The beings that had begun to take shape from Dialga's birth could finally complete themselves, taking Xerneas' life-gift and shaping the world to their needs. One known as Mew was especially taken to the gift, and used it to morph into many creatures, giving birth to many that took whatever forms it desired. But Ideals again had a different idea, and birthed Yveltal, who took what life Xerneas gave for himself so that life would forever have to keep changing rather than stay immortal and stagnant. At last both were giving and taking as much as they could, and life and death stabilized. Their Third took form and silently hid away like his Mother-Fathers, preserving the precarious balance that had resulted from countless moments of strife.
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Thus was created a world suited for existence, for the many Pokemon, descendants of the original spirits to live out. Yet in time a new creature was born; from where, no one knows. Taking on the mightiest aspects of both the Black and White, yet bound by neither, they reshaped the world, taking the many Pokemon into their fold and giving them power never seen before. From their influence the Pokemon took on new forms, inspired or forced by their circumstances. Power, though, comes at a price. Should Black and White's balance be upset, the land and sea would fight again, tearing the world apart. The heartbeat and breath of existence would cease to be, Life and Death would lose their meaning, and all will be undone. In the end, the Original One awakes from his dream, then sleeps again so that it will all happen once more.
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>>23266309 we're not forcing you to post it. But if you still want to and are spooked by it, just post it in a pastebin
Anonymous
>>23266309 Seeing that this thread is going to end up dying anyway, I might as well make my little autistic request.
http://landonbay.deviantart.com/art/Autzen-s-story-ch-4-page-39-414290765 http://landonbay.deviantart.com/art/Autzen-s-story-ch4-page-40-414856423 Can someone edit/change the outcomes of these pages so that Autzen ends up having an accident in his diaper? Maybe also adding a little bit more "suspense" during his long hold? Might want to check out previous pages to know more about this autistic Buizel character. Anonymous
TheOnlyMoth
>>23266422 Woah, you weren't kidding.
I always wondered why deviantart seemed to get the "autisitc" end of the stick.
Still, like what
>>23266301 said, I don't really care how off the idea is, but I do think requests like this might get better results in the
autism threads I'll still add it, though it may take a while for someone to actually give it a shot.
Anonymous
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>>23267593 Nothing's ever been delivered at all on those autistic Locke threads that keep popping up, so I'll keep in touch here.
TheOnlyMoth