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It was alright. Didn't realize the 'its up' meant the translation. But reading it didn't add much.
I don't get what the point of making it a hypnosis story was. It barely changed anything, didn't involve Hypno itself (was overdone anyway, do Malamar instead), and didn't matter in the end. Could have made Dawn either very in love with off-screen protag male or just have some aphrodisiac usage. Heck, if you are going to have a slight hint of Pokemon involvement with the borrowed hypnosis ring, why not just do "X used Sweet Scent" plot? Because right now you could swap Dawn for ANY OTHER waifu in basically any series and it would not change this doujin at all. Eh... anyway, it was very very 6 out of 10.
