>>52889465>>52889454Ok
It will take a while longer, because I intend to make it a larger story, maybe 15,000 words?
That and I'll try to make this new stories prose a scratch prettier, because looking back, the first one's kind of... eh.
Lots of "You do"'s and "she said"s and other repetitive sentence openers, not a lot of nice descriptives/adjectives, metaphors, or pretty sentence forms. Story and pacing could use a little work, too.
I'll put it on the next upcoming thread, it'll take a while but hopefully be a more quality product.
That and maybe rewrite the first one a bit, make it cleaner and prettier to read.
I'll reread my Jack London set in preparation.
