Am I carrying a curse? That's like the 4th or 5th thread that's died early after I posted a story.
>>73447619Thanks for reading. Looking back over the original Holocalypse makes me glad I went through with the remake since it was pretty hard to read through, so hearing you say it's written better makes me feel a little proud. Most of the plot will be told using that switch between intermissions of the past and the main story since it'll give me a chance to make some of the characters more important to the narrative. Amelia for example has gone from "random girl" to a key part of the overarching story and I've got a lot planned for her.
The version of the wasteland in the original also felt too soft so it's good to see the desolate world I've made this time get noticed. Nice to hear the action read well too, but the music really had nothing to do with me. Lost Judgment just fucking killed it with their soundtrack.
If you're thinking of adding music to your own story, don't think about it too hard. Just find a track that you like and play it while you read the scene in mind. If it works, just throw in a link.>>73465848Yeah, it's a complete overhaul. I'll still be following the story of the original (including the planned stuff that never got released) and include key scenes
(save Aqua, meet Botan, liberate Albatross, get bullied by small women, coast trip, Sui, Vilton, hospital ambush and escape) but I wanted to add way more scenes to the story and make it more coherent. A few changes to the cast as well, which I see you've noticed.
Koyo will indeed be starring. As for Aqua, she has a lot to come so her sickness is only the beginning of her relationship with (You). The amount of worldbuilding and lore will ease up in the second chapter and even more so in the third, but I'll keep that in mind. I mostly just needed to get a lot of it out of the way for context and building the setting.
>that image is pure kino and I respect the effort to make one.Please don't. It started out as a joke and I spent half an hour in MS paint making it.
