>>41180061>>41187350As promised, here's a review of the chapter.
Long story short - I loved it! It's a definite improvement when compared to the two previous ones. You've taken the criticism given to heart and worked to improve on it. I'm glad to see that! Your chapter has benefited from it, too.
It's especially refreshing to see other members of Kuro's crew get some "screen time", too. The part with Korone in the bakery was honestly incredible in my opinion, as it did a great job in showcasing a bit of how Korone is with her family, as well as the way she was brought up. I love moments like these.
Kuro was written especially sweet in this chapter. A bit rough around the edges, but that's a huge part of her charm and I love it! I honestly can't wait to see more fluff with her further on in the story!
The whole arcade trip was incredibly fun to read through. I loved the way Kuro behaved and spoke while in it so much.
The twist with the plush at the end of it was a nice touch, too. I was honestly hoping to see something like this the moment the tickets and the prizes were mentioned.Overall, a very solid, sweet and fluffy chapter! I thoroughly enjoyed it and am eager to see more! I can hardly point out anything I disliked about it or any sort of criticism I can give you. Perhaps someone more experienced may be able to, but I honestly can't.
The one thing I can say is regarding the ending of the chapter. And it's something along the lines of:
please don't hand Anon over to Botan. I crave my fluffy delinquent Kuro romance so much, it's actually unreal!All that said, you did absolutely incredible job and I enjoyed reading through the chapter!
Thank you very much for writing it! I hope you keep going and I hope to read the next chapter soon!
But, of course, don't rush yourself. Have fun and go at your own pace.
