>>53100696I don't really have much more to add that everyone else hasn't already said. The prose you've made is actually fucking beautiful, perfect for a one-shot like this.
Honestly my only real problem is that the 'no closure' ending doesn't really work; if 'he never found out what happened' maybe she should have moved away or something because the tone feels like it's 'still happening' rather than 'something from the past'. Maybe the ending would have worked if you had an intro to establish this was all a memory but as is it's kind of like a story stopping before the ending; it feels less like it was ending and more like it was the starting point to a revenge plot since the narration still feels 'recent'.
Other than that this is a pretty solid one-shot, maybe it could have explored nene on meds some more but it's a solid 8/10 that trips at the end.