>>35881515Well then, I haven't read smut in over 6 months now and was planning on keeping it that way, but given that you wrote not only futa, but futa Risu, I just had to give a go on this newly budding artist.
The first thing I'd recommend doing is to please do a read over on what you for grammatical errors. They take the reader out of it. It's only 2K words but I noticed 3 or 4 mistakes that could've been avoided. The setup was pretty good, but I do believe that the anon was too quick to give into sucking her cock based on his supposed reluctance. Honestly, either you drop down to your knees and go "yes mommy" or you tell her to fuck off for reading your mind, the in between you were going for needs to be drawn out longer in temptation style. Whatever though, I get it, quick, trashy smut, "just get to the fucking".
Moona's involvement in the story felt too rushed, she fell flat to me. Risu was fine, but there was a very usual lack of description of her animal parts during sex. Not much to say since it's 2K words, the smut is fine, it kind of reflects on how I write which felt odd at times. So yeah, setup was really well done, the rest was meh. It's hot enough to jerk off to but not enough to finish.
You have inspired me to write something futa though. Give and take, that's how I got into writing futa fanfic for this place after all.