>>37953984Hey!
Glad you liked the Final Yab description, the whole scene visually is heavily inspired by the Sistine Chapel, there's something really good about having a huge, incredibly intricate art piece multiple buildings above you, I wanted to channel some of that.
As soon as I noticed it was physically possible, I knew I had to put in the "visible mountain" thing. I can just imagine Mori sitting on the mountaintop, using her divine vision to check what the Shitomo are up to 300 kilometers away.
Catalog dive is as good as it is thanks to Sojourning mainly, anon did a great job with the descriptions in that.Ah, footnote rant time. They're the bane of my existence, and the two systems are left in to get feedback on which is less bad. Pros of the chapter 1 method: it's all contained on one page. Cons, you can't backlink to the footnote from the Notes section unless you give the footnote its own line, which breaks the flow of the paragraphs a bit imo. And then, you have to scroll back to wherever you were. Also, the content of the "Notes" can kind of spoil what happens in the chapter if it's put at the start, and if it's put at the end there's a risk of seeing the last lines of the chapter.
The second chapter system resolves some of these, but forces you to open a new page, which is annoying.
I take it you prefer the first system, then?
Oh, yes, editorial mistake. Thanks for the headsup.
A conventional breaching charge, it could plausibly be chuubanitically augmented, but I don't think it's necessary in this instance.
Ah, that's meatbro's idea! We didn't discuss it in depth, but I envision it like a space hulk from WH40k but set in one of those giant Junk ships with a dozen sail masts. It's infested by a schizo cult that has been plaguing the coasts of /ggg/, as hinted by the presence of chumbud artefacts and the shrimp troll, possibly linked to the recent quietude of the Goddess.
I had a perfectly good spec ops Holy Ghost just sitting over there, I just had to do it. Mea was established as being a bit /meat/cist, so she fit well for the role.
You're right, this is a bit disjointed. That's what I get for not having my stream of consciousness looked over by someone before posting. I'll rewrite some bits to clarify. The enemy catalognaut refers to the Matiyotl catalognaut, whose presence she can feel deeper in the ship (he's why the shaman that ran towards Nat that she killed was injured).
Nothing else on Moriko atm, but she's a young, talented catalognaut with schizo-related trauma and under the supervision of the Goddess Faithful, so I'm sure she'll pop up again.Thank you for the detailed feedback!
