>>29522536As a somewhat experienced smut reader, here's my take:
try to focus some more on the feeling behind each action, instead of just listing what happened. You could probably fill out an entire paragraph with just the feelings the guy experienced after the first penetration, before he even started moving.
1. This helps pad the story out a bit
2. Helps the reader with imagining the scene better, really immerse them in the act, leading to a better fap session imo.