>>67184591Yeah I might have not leaned enough into either, so it might have ended up as not doing either in a memorable way. I probably could have drawn out the titfucking scene a little more, since that's what was on my mind a lot when I building up to the smut. Rereading it, it lacks a certain punch to the sex, but I can't be sure what exactly that is.
I'm happy you found it to be a fun read despite the flaws though. The practice should hopefully help me write better oneshots in the future as well as future smut installments of my main WiP.