>>54204535I think I see what you mean, only I'm not sure how to really correct that. The plan down the line is for these three plot threads to meet in the middle, as in all the roads will lead to the same place. I'm trying to make them be different perspectives for the same problem but it seems it isn't coming across as eloquently.
I get what you're saying, just not sure how to really fix it. It's a big critique that is going to be hard to shift, unless you have suggestions of course. Thank you for the critique, I'm just stumped on what to do about it other than the obvious of having all these plots come together in the near future.
I will also have to bend the villainous characters so they can be villains unfortunately. My dear sweet airheaded Mel obviously isn't an over confident centuries lived vampire with an evil plot so I need to unfortunately bend her a bit, same thing with Iroha. Though I will try to tone down the haughtiness a bit since it does come off rather cartoonish.
Thank you for the thorough critique. If you have any suggestions on how I can fix the issues, please tell me because I am not entirely sure how I'd fix it.
