>>34615125Ah, you guys are doing the round robin style, that's nice. And yea, I noticed you put a bit of an emphasis on the emotions Sherah felt in this chapter.
One thing I would personally do, however, is give her some dialogue while she was in tears and feeling this twister of emotions, to really drive home the point of how happy she was to finally be here.
Nothing wrong with how you did it, but if she spoke before she calmed down, it could serve as another insight into her character, one that wouldn't be told from a third person perspective.
