>>29937919One too many beers yesterday? I'm guessing the nap didn't help in the end.
I like the small descriptions of both the room and NIls were nice, short and to the point. Really helps set the scene. What I am missing, however, is a description of the superintendant. If he is supposed to be the central character, it would be nice to have an image to put in our heads.
Also, english leaking out a bit again? Some parts had a bit of a weird flow to them, at least in my opinion.
All in all, I'm looking forward to seeing where you take this story.
