>>49530543I thought it was cute. You captured the reminiscent feeling and triggers of a short but powerful experience that can come with spur of the moment attraction.
The part where they exchanged underwear was a chef's kiss kinda touch. For other feedback I think sentences like:
Two years ago, at the Dolphin Hotel, where I first smelled Hoshimachi Suisei’s panties. Is a little much out of the gate I feel. Maybe elude to something else about the comet instead of the straight source? I'd also suggest that if you're going to name of brand of boxers for the anon, you might as well go all in and color them too. Still, nice job overall.
