>>56481001Mystery is fine when it comes to characters, it even adds a lot of interest and depth to them, but the foreshadowing and presentation needs a lot of time to cook properly. As a reader, something that would have probably helped in the regard to her recent development, is a side chapter on the past experience that changed her, and with her as the focus, it gives you an opportunity to really show what she is thinking. You are already writing a story that is giving the reader multiple points of view at different times/areas, you can use that to your full advantage. It might also come off as less mysterious since I don't feel like we've been given enough time or context to know what Polka is truly like within your world. As fanfic readers we will default to our general understanding of the chuuba and how they normally conduct themselves, and for things like background and traits that specific to (You)r interpretation and experiences, your goal as the writer is to present that. There are plenty of good ways to give more information while also giving less. For example my Polka
>Never goes into what her family or home life was truly like, just that she wanted a change and peaced out>Has apprehensions towards kitsune specific things, but won't go into explaining them due to embarrassment or something else. And doesn't know that her fennec pussy will entrap anon for hours on end. >Had an experience or person from her past be presented to her that sent her in a horrified flight, she said she would eventually open up about what she saw, but she wasn't ready just yetThat kinda stuff sprinkled across the content is how you can build up mystery and intrigue. Use the world you created and the fact that you can literally make experiences the fuck up to your advantage.