>>57897783Small grammar nitpick at the start:
Not only that, you were also requesting her to provide some sort of service from her, while she was that small. Should be something like:
Not only that, you were also requesting her to provide some sort of service for you, while she was that small. The original way was kinda an awkward delivery.
While how it goes down is not necessarily out of place for the rat of chaos, I think you are missing on the core aspects of the size difference fetish. The imagery you create is a little more jarring that hot. That said though, your prose isn't bad by any means, so I think if you did a bit more setup and made the smut a little longer this would be a delightful gift for people wanting that tiny girl fix.
I think there's an easy opportunity for a fun setup with this, let Bae make a game out of it.
>Bae agrees to shrink and play with your dick IF you can catch her in a game of cat and mouse while she's small. You can have little tom and jerry esc hijinks for a little bit and try to trap the little rat. You'd be surprised what calculated lengths a man can go to when a fetish is the prize.