>>22370097I just recently read Festival of Sensations and, man... That was incredible. It made me realize I need to work much harder on my dialogue during sex. Personally I don't particularly like all the porn dialogue that ends up being written in sex scenes as a bit of extra material because I would find it very out of character for most of these girls to scream out expletives that way, but in FoS the teasing and possessive talk during sex was fantastic and had the same if not better results than simply throwing lewd sentences for the sake of it. That meant that when Matsuri does cry out "fuck my ass!" and the like the impact is way stronger.
I need to write my girls less like tunas and to be more vocal, even if just whispering sweet nothings as opposed to crassly begging to be wrecked.
