>>50662914I'm actually kinda into the idea the more I think about it. I would have to alter it a little since so far I don't plan for any chuubas I want to write to be fully deceased, so the ghosts stuck in shipping purgatory would need to be other characters.
>>50660186You do have me hooked on wanting to know what is going to happen in this anon, so nice job on that. I think you could stand to make these chapters a little longer so that more can be allowed to happen during them. Your story obviously has a big overarching plot-line going on, so feel free to let yourself put a few more scenes in there to move things along, or flesh things out more. In this chapter for example, I think the anon handled the happenings and revelations a little too smoothly. You might want to play around with telling the reader more about his internal thoughts and how he is processing things.