>>37980849Ahh, it's really neat to see the result of all your research in the recent threads come together in this! The skis, the music, the fog, the elves, it's all there.
>melody echoingI've read enough /vnug/ stories to find this ominous... I like how she never stops playing, she just transitions to different, more mood appropriate songs, like a dynamic video game soundtrack. Or a good bard, I guess kek. Great scene
Also, your worries about military stuff were misplaced, I think. The action was pretty well explained and easy to visualize, even if it was complex.
>We will ride eternal, shiny and chrome!Fantastic, just fantastic. I love that movie, this got a good chuckle out of me.
Like a falcon locking on its prey, the bow made a sharp dive, its enchanted hair whet the strings, the swishing sound piercing through the singular mind of the soldiers.The red lights on them pierced through the dusty snow, illuminating their specter blood redFew lines that I liked especially.
And as usual, it's always great to see Palkyries fighting, I like the detail of one of the reindeermen holding his staff with both his hand and his tail.
I learned a silly amount of musical terminology through those links btw, nice touch.
Great story, I liked it a lot!
>>37982653>On their body, in addition to the pieces of armor made of hardened leather, hide, and metal, all of them also carried with them an oil lamp made of dulled silver. Even though all of them were filled, none of them were *it*.I think that was meant to be lit? There's a few typos like that, but that's the only one that interrupted my reading.
>>37982846Did you know I'm ESL too OG kek.
