>>74119359I liked it quite a lot, its a fun world to try and pierce together and i like that you didnt pull punches without dipping into edgyness. I think you need to slow the pace a bit, since its a bit breakneck how it will just jump from scene to scene. Maybe paint the world a bit more.
I also liked the magician thing. Good thinking thereId be interested in reading more of this, so keep ait it
>I suck at naming thingsNot really. A bad name would be like "Slavetopia" and "Freedomland" or some dumb shit
