>>70023730Your prose is easy to get through, it's a little short to say anything more than that. The set up is not bad, but I gotta ask
did Suisei WANT to get caught? Sending anon on a task where there clearly wasn't one would bring him back in like 5-10 minutes tops. Unless you want to portray Suisei as a quickshot, which might make a cute little detail when the smut actually happens. As for writing smut, it's hard to say what advice I can give without seeing some of it in action. You should try just going for it and write what strikes you from the scene you're creating. You seemed to have created an easy path/opening to start the smut though. Like the signals are there, it's just up to you to really delve into the emotional attachment the two have for each other and have them cross that threshold together.
Maybe have Suisei ask anon if he likes her scent too, then she gives him her shirt she wore and asks him to huff it. Later on she can get real freaky and practically hold her panties or bra in his face as she rides him. 