>>21061359I'm conflicted about this. On one hand it's hot and the cheating itself is well done, but it feels like it's going too fast, and other than Towa, the other chuubas don't feel like themselves, Kanata especially. It's mostly the fact that I can't imagine sweet, shy Kanata suddenly deciding to have emotionless sex with (you).
The way I saw it from the prompt, I thought she would have listened to your woes about your lack of sex life, and after some deliberation, slept with (you). Then she would have struggled with the fact that she had fucked her friend's boyfriend, but that (you) were so good in bed, not just in sex, and that Towa just wasn't attending to your needs, that she would do it again. Then, Coco finds out and decides that if Towa wasn't going to fuck you, while Kanata clearly wanted to, she'd allow it but only if she joined in.
That's not what happens. Kanata just silently leads you to your room, gives a half-assed excuse as to why she's doing it, and then in the act itself she seems to bounce between being annoyed and not giving a shit. If that was a chuuba like Kronii or Ina, I'd get it, but Kanata? Then ch2 comes, suddenly she wants to talk, she doesn't actually talk, just leads (you) to Coco who also wants to fuck. No explanation, no emotion, no investment. Coco's sorta in character though.
Again, Towa, (you)r conflict and the cheating are all well done, it's the other chuubas who aren't. They act more like portable pussies than actual characters, which is similar to how most NTR media portrays the bull, a walking, talking, smug cock connected to a human body that the girl falls for, but most NTR is comprised of short original stories where the characters are nothing more than blank slates, whereas yours is using characters with well defined personalities.
