Man, I am so late to these. I'll try not to repeat what's already said or bring up anything already addressed.
>>51964679First of all, I loved this. I've been looking forward to the second installment for a while now and I am quite satisfied. I absolutely love the beginning beach scene, very descriptive language, cute fluff, and a reminder of the core concept all in one. But I particularly love it as it's a great moment to show Anon beginning to fall. I think singular moments like that are quintessential to the romance genre. Very well done.
Like everyone else, I love the way Towa gets confused about human concepts and sayings. Although I do question what devil society is like if Towa is confused about so much. Speaking of Towa, I like what you did with her. From what I understand, Towa is not a very open person and is kind of shy at times. I think you got some of her quirks well, (being uncomfortable receiving expensive gifts and being in crowds, liking sweets, not knowing how to react to being called cute, her glowing eyes, etc) Finally, I liked the Our Cures connection personally, I'm a big sucker for connected universes like that.
I generally agree with what the others said about Towa and Anon's dialog. Although I don't think it's a huge issue in terms of his part, because Towa values kindness above all. Going forward, you could have Towa be a bit more headstrong and/or even try to help Anon out unprompted. (I know she's a bit of a clean freak, so her cleaning the dorm, for example). I feel like Anon and Towa are actually very similar, so I think an interaction based on the concept of "who has a debt to who" could be interesting. I do want to say though, I disagree with the others about the narrative itself. I actually think a story like this needs to have a part that is just a slice of life. We need to know how Towa is initially integrating and affecting Anon's life before we can see any bumps in the road. It's setting up the stakes, as I see it.
The only thing I'm not fond of is
how fast the attempted kiss comes I think it jumps the shark a bit. A moment like that I feel should come once the two of them are more comfortable in their respective roles in each other's lives. It "doesn't feel earned," even if it's unsuccessful Anon's feeling physically attracted to her is more than fine, but I think his horniness is rather sudden. The clothes-changing scene reads less like "Oh no, she's hot" and more like "Man I've been horny for her for a while." to me.
Overall, I loved it and I'm very much looking forward to the next installment.
I'll write up something for the Polka one in a bit. 
