>>1405403Thanks for helping out again. I'm going through now with your comments in mind. There are some I disagree with (plus some I've tried and failed to implement before), but even just seeing a suggestion I disagree with helps reduce my uncertainty.
Regarding the murderer poem(?), there's a redone version here
>>1405350 that I think addresses the issues with the original (space around text). The spacing between text and image is a little awkward (it's not the same for the title, the poem, or the attribution), so I'll likely tinker with that, and I'll take a stab at balancing the second chunk.
Pic rel is the Tomboy Dream fixed up a bit. Scrunched the text to line things up with your suggestions. I've set the last two lines of text apart again to make it a bit more visually distinct (originally they were part of the final paragraph), and I like the imagery of those final thoughts being crashed against the rocks (even if incidental). The attribution is still hard to place, and in principle I dislike having it obscured, but it being the nth "Anonymous" assuages that, plus having it come out of the shadow makes it feel like a natural element of the scene, and draws the text across the whole page rather than trapping it above.
>Re: GeneralsThis comes down to page conservation, and partially to the fact that I don't know where else to place these two pieces thematically (plus neither one feels good enough to have its own page). So I'm resistant to splitting them up, but I'll try to improve the balance between the two. I visually extended the poem with those fuzzy lines, so I could reduce the contrast of those (maybe with a gradient of white towards the bottom). Giving the poem a title, even if just "Untitled", might also separate it enough visually to give the two pieces their own space.
>>1405404>>1405414The aim is to make something print-worthy, even if most anons are only going to read it as a PDF. So I am concerned about page count, at least in principle.
