I read "Sweets and Silk" (
https://rentry.org/kqkw98) by Spinarak-anon and Kiyo-anon. I thought it was pretty good. The characters and their interactions were written well, especially the banter between Kiyo and Rasmus. The characters' plan/actions seemed logical
and kinda cute--stealing all the Halloween candy is such a childish, cartoonish plot, but it was fun to read about. My favorite part was definitely the ending, since it was comfy.
But there were parts where I got confused and couldn't quite visualize what was going on, because I felt like things weren't explained or described clearly enough (like parts of the robbery and window crash scenes). There were also typos and grammar mistakes throughout, although nothing that ruined the story.
Overall, I think it was a fun read. I'm impressed you guys were able to pull it off in a collab format, and I'm excited to see if more people write collab stories in the future.
>>54706843>>54707325Neat story, and a really fascinating concept (albeit sad). Cool realistic details like how he struggles to read the human language, walk upright, or even remember his own name after spending so much time as a Pokemon. And the Squirtle part was especially interesting and tragic. Pretty well-written overall.
Kinda confused about why he has
two different Pokemon hands in the ending, though.
>>54708197Good work guys!
>>54708594I think there's potential for a story featuring Booker and Kiyo, but I dunno how to write it.
>>54710751Thanks!
>>54711737There'd probably be a lot of variety, considering each species would probably have its own flavor preferences.
>>54713176That looks cool.
>>54713971Welcome! Nice art, and interesting concept.
Similar to Clara and Smoke's situation. 