>>53565855I'd post my own art, but I hesitate to call it good... I'll post this instead. Pretty sure it's official art.
>>53565980>>53565992Looks good! It's cool to see the process, too.
I love how you're drawing so many of our dudes.
I bet Kaiji's the one who carved the LossBy the way...
>https://rentry.org/mk77tI read your story, Chespin. The characters and dialogue are written well, the Numel scenes are hilarious, and Chespin's reaction to the boss mon is understandable. Aggression is unusual for him, but it made sense here.
I guess the main criticism I have is that your stories feel a bit formulaic, like they have the same basic plot of "go out, fight boss, get reward". But they're still enjoyable. And it's good that you change the formula a bit here by
having the boss mon actually be friendly.
>https://rentry.org/GuildmasterAnticsI also read your story, Lliam. I like the overall plot and the concept, with the GM getting bored of work and trying to have fun. The way he
runs off secretly, then learns the error of his ways, makes for a satisfying conclusion and some character development. Lliam's thoughts/opinions are interesting to see, and I like how we get some glimpses of his backstory. Also, there was some good comedy, and it's cool that you include so many of our characters.
But the writing is admittedly clunky overall, and it's sometimes hard to understand what's going on, like in the part starting with "My partner laughs at me as he sits down". Also, remember what KFC said about dialogue in the last thread. I also feel like some of Lliam's choices are too weird, like trying to destroy his own window instead of simply removing it from the frame, or making those platforms in the air without testing it first and confirming that it's actually safe and won't kill him.
But overall, it wasn't a bad story.