>Banned for three days for using link to rich text pastebin.Well that was a nice vacation at least. I'll make sure to not do that again
>>50828663 I think my issue is setting all the pieces up, construction going on, pillar on a stage, guy on the pillar, the lights (which I've still not found a good word for, I think in my current draft it's "cable of lights")
This is the most bearable draft I've put together so far, pacing wise, if you wanna take a look at this. Warning. I haven't SPAG-checked this at all, and I have a tendency to drop articles, so apologies if this is unreadable.
https://pastebin.com/xDSbWeUm>>50829095 Foreign as in they're from main land Johto and not Alto Mare :P (Random detail, it's annoying Alto Mare has to be in Johto instead of the real life location of Venice, which would put it near Kalos)