People often complain about sleeping on hay, but here I am sleeping on hardened lava. You guys got it lucky.
By the way, it's weird how the partner just randomly has an extra house to give the hero. What's up with that?
>>53545012I like it. Entertaining comedy, strong characterization, and not too many grammatical problems. It's good that you improved the formatting this time around. Nice to see no more wall-of-text paragraphs.
I did find Numel obnoxious... but I know you were trying to make him annoying, so I guess it's okay. And some really good jokes came out of it, to be fair.
One issue I saw: speech tags after a quote that ends in ? or ! don't need to be capitalized. The "He" here should be lowercase, for example:
>"Mister, can you fry this berry for me?" He asked>>53545684>>53545687Cute! I like them a lot.
>>53546831I agree with the other guy. Being fashionable is a requirement for being a guildmaster.
>>53549509I've seen him before. I admire his dedication to his ship, as weird as it is.
>>53549896I fully support it.
>>53550008This. Pure, cute, well-developed romance is always better than lazy, rushed lewds.
>>53549232>>53550211>I want to be inside this pictureSame. It would be so comfy to hang out with friends like that.
