>>58475489First off, what you gave me isn't discouraging at all, and I super respect and appreciate your opinion on this and that you took the time to try and convey how you feel about my writing style. I suppose to sum up your points about vocab and literary techniques, I don't know what I don't know. That is certainly no excuse mind you, but I'm very much a work in progress. I do try to keep things in mind like how often I'm using a word or look up synonyms and such when I'm in the middle or writing sometimes, but it sounds like I could be doing more on that front. The bit about it feeling like plain bread might be a product of how myself have very plain tastes at my core, like for real, I will eat plain bread and be happy with it, my taste buds just roll that way for some reason, and I'm not super hard to please when it comes to other aspects of like. I often get a little self conscious of if I'm being too flowery, but it sounds like I could ditch that preconception a little bit and try to really adopt that "show don't tell" mentality. I think I might also have a hard time finding that fine line as well, but I can keep working on that.
On the topic of the dialogue, do you feel the hard back and forth I tend to do contribute to it being too simplistic? Some of the way my characters might tend to spell things out to you might come from the idea that I built the main group up to wear their hearts on their sleeves with one another, again, not an excuse for poor writing, but as I'm writing things I go like "Yes this character would flat out say this thing to the other", and that kinda stuff. You've given me a lot to think about in a good way. I've definitely made some good strides since I started writing almost a year ago, but I can definitely get a lot better and with your feedback, I got some good targets to focus on.
If you got any recommended I could read or re-read to possibly get some better handles on my weakspots, I'd be happy to hear about them from anyone.
Again, thanks for the well thought out feedback bro and trying to give my story a chance. Even if it couldn't grab you, it means a lot that you tried and have been able to bring some important things to my attention.
