>>67756989Your prose is easily a good baseline for a fantasy story. I would echo what another anon said and let yourself try to expand on the picture you're trying to paint. I would also say this is rather short for a pilot. Polka's segment ends on enough of a note that you could piece together what she might be doing, but Anon's end not so much. Perhaps another scene of him possibly reflecting on the current job with the younger sellswords, and you can use that to kinda set the stage for his own reasoning for being out on the road. Or if the current scene with him isn't meant to go anywhere specific, you can cut to a completed job and him wondering what he should do next. If you need some more feedback or want to brainstorm ideas, feel free to ask! I'm looking forward to what you do with this, nice job!
