>>54918092That certainly went from 0-60 pretty quick. It was serviceable as far as the dialogue goes. I would say you repeat using their direct names back to back too often though. You can use their natural descriptors to identify them in text, or even she or her if it's clear the focus of the action is still on the same individual.
The bit about the claws kinda seemed out of place. Like if Anon was slowly inching towards their ears or tails, it make sense to receive the warning, but the threat seems unwarranted. I think you captured the twins' excitable and overall cute nature pretty well. Maybe you could have added a line or two about how they might almost share sensations in a way, since how Fuwawa seemed to just know when Mococo was gonna climax came outta left field. The choice in the final shot was pretty good, we don't get enough finishers like that. I guess one more critique is that you can really take advantage of the idea that when the two start to have fun, they become almost uncontrollable. In the height of the acts, when Anon was feeling apprehensive, THAT might have been a good time to bring back the claw threat. Overall, it reads like you were stricken by inspiration and acted on it, and that's always great to see!
