>>44619884>>44620720Great feedback! All very actionable.
>DreamsReally glad yall liked it. It was originally longer, but I wanted to let it have more of an air of mystery to it.
whether or not its actually Fauna... its gonna be up to the reader to find out>Name repetition>Paragraph spacingThis is a consequence of a lot of start and stop writing. I'd write for a couple of minutes. Drop it. Come back in an hour. Write a little more. Come back another day. Etc. Scattered thoughts mushed together. Believe it or not, it was worse before the polish. Will keep it in mind during the editing phase for the next chapter though; easy fix.
>ZinogreThank you so much for giving me a picture I can reference. I completely glazed over descriptions of the cub/pup because I wasn't too sure other than some scaly green skin.
