>>42297215Thanks for the read!
>>42306632Could you be more specific as to what you found rough about it?
>>42308924I have no excuse for my tenses, as it is my inner ESL shinning through.
I've always written in past tenses, so I switched it up to see how it would affect the scene I'm trying to paint, while doing some editing I did notice time and time again that they get muddled up in certain parts, but I'm trying to improve.
>. One thing that struck me as strange was Anon not knowing how to read, yet it was mentioned that "a girl from his class" had said something to him, implying he goes to school.You didn't miss anything, I did.
I intended for that section to be set years back. In that scene, Anon is around 6 years old, while the premise (as seen up until now) is when he's around 9, approaching 10.
Thanks for the read, and for taking your time to write feedback!
