>>53467716I think this is good, and cute! Here are my thoughts on it and the previous part:
>Chespin's Introduction>https://rentry.org/v7sc4Chespin's reactions and thought processes are written well. In particular, I like how you describe the way he runs to the sunlight and basks in it, and the part where he discovers his vines. The interactions and dialogue between Chespin and Wooper are also nice, and you convey Wooper's friendliness well. The writing is also pretty good on a technical level, with not too many grammatical mistakes.
>Chespin's Followup>https://rentry.org/mpieqThe relationship between the hero and partner continues to feel very wholesome and endearing. I especially like Wooper's amazement with the idea of human inventions. I hope he'll get to see some inventions someday. I'm sure even something really basic will fascinate him.
The way Wooper's optimism can diminish so quickly when he's startled or disappointed, but then return really quickly, is a nice touch that adds a bit of depth to him. That's better than having him be 100% peppy all the time.
Also, I'm curious about the slightly ominous vibe regarding Wooper possibly having a secret, and where that's going to lead.
And although Beast isn't my character, the way you wrote him feels consistent with how his author wrote him, so I think you handled him well.
In both stories, my main critique is simply about formatting, since it looks like you sometimes hit Enter once when you're starting a new paragraph, and sometimes twice. So the formatting looks a bit inconsistent. But that's pretty minor, and an easy fix.
So, nice work overall. Chespin and Wooper are a good pair, and I'm looking forward to seeing more of them.
