>>59923162For me the bigger problem is the tension between characters aren’t high enough
The demon lord could just tell her to BTFO, since he’s bored in this situation
Maybe you captured Shiori to get information of the hero’s party, so you have to hold her captive. But she kept accusing you being a sexpest despite you treat her fairly. Then connect back to the ending you wrote.
Also if Shiori made the conclusion that you’re not evil would be more natural.
>You look at her and answer half-heartedly: “ Cause you’re hungry. That rumble was loud.”>“No it’s not!” Shiori denied loudly with her face blushed , then mumbled quietly.” I guess you’re not that bad.”>“Only for now though.” She came back with her senses, looking at you with wary.Still I like this story, feels like an anime opening
